I wish I was a rockstar's image
I wish I was his picture
I couldn't get any slimmer
but I can't sing
I do all the drugs I can
but I can't play guitar
And if I had a piano,
Yes if I had a piano,
I wouldn't have a friend, to play the drums for me
So I keep looking at his picture
He is my friend you cannot see
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I really liked this poem.
I understand your irritation at the fact that there's always something wrong.
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it was a strange read and the words didnt mean that much and thats what i think a poem is about, the emotion of moving your reader,strange, not really the sort of poetry im in to
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yeah, it's kind of experimental I suppose.. thanks for your opinion
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this was crazy something i havent heard before i liked it a lot!!
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Thanks, that's great to hear, since it was my intention to avoid writing in a 'typically' poetic way.
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Maybe a little lighter on the drugs and the guitar playing might come a bit easier?? I dunno, just a thought.
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Sorry, but that's not really what the poem is about and therefore kind of irrelevant.
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A funny little story, but does not resemble poetry at all
Try to use your imagination in constructing words
that have meaning and power behind them, able if not to move mountains at least the heart of your poor reader. -
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I hardly think poetry has to resemble anything at all by law. That is the freedom a poet grants himself. That aside, I see what you mean, and was never so into this one myself. Just checking for some reactions. Funny little story is still a worthwhile verdict, thanks.
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