Two lines it is to see
two lines it is to me to lines it is in a fountian
to lines that it is to see to la te it is if you fountian
tolate it is if you see two lines it is in a fountian
to lines it is to see
Telleein I ain't the one to see
telleein i ain't the one to be
If i was i would be and thats the end of the fountian
and thats the end of the see if you could could you see
i ain't the end of the fountian i ain't the end of the see
Toralie toralie toralie see i ain't the end of the mountian
i ain't the end of the see to lands in the mountian
to lands in the mountian see to lands in the mountian
i ain't the mighty Seven t three to lay is to lay
to lie is to lie but in the end of the mountian
i ain't in the end'
Author notes
To me i can see
A contest entry
- Trading Places – A Contest for the Imaginative by KayJay.
1500 points, ended May 7, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I think you've captured the imaginative part - although I don't see where this addresses the "trading places" part... After reading this many times, there is a certain elegance to it much like in Jaberwocky... a sense of purpose just out of my reach.
Thank you for your entry... I'll make a final selection after the contest ends.
Ken
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All of your poems are somewhat the same, and none of them seem to make complete sense. If there is a method behind these words, then you've made it very difficult for the audience to read.
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