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Forgive Me

You promised me you would return
I sit here everyday my love

In this misty land I long for you
To feel your breath against mine
To hear your softly spoken words

This rose you gave has not wilted
I feel your passion burning through it
You are the memories keeping me alive

I promised I would let God take me
Forgive me, need to be with you now

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Photo by Melanie Masuth aka Vampirella87 at www.deviantART.com

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  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    May 10, 2008

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    Heartbreaking

    The love penned just overflows so easily into your words I felt as if it was you yourself who has gone through this
    Beautiful write

    ♥
    Thank you & Best of luck
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • Angelflower
    May 4, 2008

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    Awww. this was just so sad!!
    It really pulls at the heart..
    You did a wonderful job with the prompt!!
    WEll done!! best of luck to you..


  • sanaphira
    April 29, 2008
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    umm..hope you dont mind me asking but what was your inspiration for this piece of work


  • dustookie2
    April 26, 2008

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    This is one of the most powerful emotinal poems that I have read in a long time. You just reach out a play the heart strings like the master play his finely tuned instrument making sweet music. I feel the sorrow of the words Brilliant take on the prompt ...Excellent ... Good luck in the contest.


  • Desire gold member
    April 25, 2008
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    Aaaaaaw Danggggggg!

    This one grabs at the Heartstrings
    Powerful images and emotions~

    These lines tug hard...
    You promised me you would return
    I sit here everyday my love
    Oh My~Magnificent take on the prompt!

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • earthstar
    April 25, 2008

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    This rose you gave has not wilted
    I feel your passion burning through it
    You are the memories keeping me alive

    I love your write it fits the picture so very well. I wish all love could feel like this. Great work. Tell Jennie that age is not so bad each year brings a gift.
    I really love your work.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    April 25, 2008

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    Oh baby!!! This is SO beautiful! Oh darlin you are so talented. This fits the picture perfectly. Well done sweetheart. Good luck in the contest

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