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ashley

 

All she wanted was stability
Nothing special
Just a reason to wake up
A reason to go to sleep
Seeking and searching
For that "Once upon a time..." dream
For a love she can know and feel
And not just achieve
Ashley knows all the boys
Are staring at her
Because they have more on their minds
Than just getting her phone number
And it's killing her inside
When she's everybody's Barbie doll
Craving for an altar call
The people in her life
Can't see past her eyes
Pretty blue waterfalls
Needing a Savior to reign
She can't take much more of this emptiness
Her searching that seems meaningless
All these thoughts and questions
Will God be there when I run to Him?
Do I have any chances left?
Is it too late to cry out Your name?


Ashley says
Save me from myself
Save me from this place
I've been searching for you in darkness
Finding light in the wrong place
I want someone to love me
No matter what I've done
Give me amazing grace
Show me the way
Home

Look at Ashley
She's so stable
Something special
Wakes up for God's will to be done through her
Goes to sleep for just the same
Waiting on the next day

 

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  • movedon
    July 27, 2008
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    VEAUTIFUL.

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • Lady Altheia gold member
    July 3, 2008

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    Hoodwinked

    Wow, this is really deep and I am pleased it had a happier ending than when it started. You been hoodwinked by a Poetic Bandit.


  • Kristin Melissa
    June 16, 2008

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    Koodles this is a wonderful poem!I love the story it tells, so good luck in the contest.
    Blessed be
    Mystic


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    June 14, 2008

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    awww I think it's the exact same way everyone feels, though some people seem to be lucky and have it naturally...


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    May 18, 2008
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    "altar call" isn't talking about marriage. it's talking about having a personal relationship with Jesus. it's a religious reference.

  • Judith Chandler
    May 17, 2008

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    It's normal to want unconditional love but, in my experience, that is something very rare. I like "craving for an altar call" -- that's a good line. But what will she do while she's waiting for someone to escort her to that altar? For that matter, what's she gonna do AFTER the altar.

    It is possible to be happy and single.
    jjj


  • movedon
    May 15, 2008

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    This reminds me of myself so much! Well done developing the character through the poem! I enjoyed reading this.

    good luck in our contest
    Alex and Mylee


  • foryourowngood gold member
    May 5, 2008

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    Wow, this is beautiful and in a lot of ways reminds me of myself so it hits deep. So many people feel this way about their self and so I am sure it will bring some peace and hope to a lot of readers. Wonderful write!


  • bodiejade
    April 28, 2008
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    interesting

    I lke the word placement and the ideas in rhe poem


  • P. W. Blackwell
    April 27, 2008
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    wow i really like that i was once like that looking for love when all i needed was god


  • Soul2b
    April 26, 2008

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    Hmmm Intense

    I really enjoyed reading this, with a little sorrow sense. Poor Ashley. I hope she finds her way, which seems like she is.. Being Stable


  • alwaysapartofme
    April 25, 2008
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    this is very beautiful! I liked it a lot. sweet job.


  • broken-colours
    April 25, 2008

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    "Because they have more on their minds
    Than just getting her phone number
    And it's killing her inside
    When she's everybody's Barbie doll
    Craving for an altar call
    The people in her life
    Can't see past her eyes
    Pretty blue waterfalls
    Needing a Savior to reign"

    So very true of our world today! Young girls need to know that there's more to life than catching the attention of guys or being popular. Wow, what an amazing poem. More people need to read this!


  • Amana Araya Jabari
    April 25, 2008
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    Beautiful!!!! Love It could almost b ea song..... I love it!


  • SugarCandyKittyKat
    April 25, 2008
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    Wow,it seems hopeful in a way,yet just plain sad....

    Terrific work...


  • peridotPixi
    April 25, 2008

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    i really like this poem i think you did a great job with the stucture of it, and also that you did a good job at decribing ashley, i really hope this is not the same ashley kira was writing about, but either way thats cool, keep up the great writing, -Amy


  • hemp-lover
    April 25, 2008
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    this is really good

    i really liked this poem...

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