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Captive

Close my heart
And board it up,
Let no one enter
Life’s cruelest piece of art.

Shield away,
From what’s not real.
Don’t be afraid
Of my hearts decay.

Lying dormant
In silent recognition,
Its malicious desires
My bleeding torment.

Burning the abomination
And the impure faith,
That follows the beatings
Of the slow degeneration.

Let no one disrupt,
The hollowed heart,
The chronic mistrust,
The perpetually corrupt.

Ignore the worthless plight
Lock me up inside,
Throw away life’s sacred key
Held captive with all my might.

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  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    May 2, 2008

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    LOL sis I see my good friend Dmonik commented which I am not suprised at all. any ways this is quite a superb poem & roflm,ao @ your friend Tomorrow's comment I concuire with her. you really did let your words flow & your mouth open with quite a vast vocabulary there. anyw ays over all this is quite an exquisite poem & I really like what you were talking about with this poem. anyways keep up the great work sis Bro


  • Hello...No.One.Home silver member
    April 27, 2008

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    Chilling, cold and frightening claire just the way I like it.

    But where do you find some of those words and then be able to slot them into your poem like they were meant to be there all along.

    anywho, the line;

    Life’s cruelest piece of art.

    I think there should be a 'the' after Life's or 'is', I'm not sure but something in that line sounds off.



    A great Poem from a person I love and I hope your muse in still there.

    -giggle- happy?


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    April 26, 2008

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    Superb vocabulary dear. The flow, the rhyme, everything is great. It's brilliant.

    And I love you.

    Forever

    ♥


  • Tarja
    April 25, 2008

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    It's always nice when you come back to a poet you haven't read something from in awhile. Especially when the piece is written with such emotion and depth. Well done m'love. This was fantastic. I think you have so much going on inside your head and posess such a beautiful mind.. sad but beautiful.


  • Xtortured-insanityX
    April 25, 2008
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    awesomeness

    this is one of the best
    poems ive read so far
    keep it up


  • demonic66
    April 25, 2008
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    I LOVE THIS


  • Dmonik
    April 25, 2008

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    I Like this...
    It's powerful and very well written. It has an air of 'uselessness' and the feeling of abandonment to it. Excellant writing Claire-Anne.
    Keep it up

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