Tick, tick, tick, goes the tapping of fingertips;
As the 3PM bomb approaches sweet climax.
Bam! Brief satisfaction.
Releasing institutionalized drones off to the world.
Single file they march, silent, they reach their goal;
Paying tribute to the time card god.
Regrouping at HOME base,
Forming average 4.5 families.
Self-absorbed husbands,
Buying lust off the interwebs.
Hideously picture perfect plastic wives,
Forced into pill popping frenzy, a cure for loneliness;
While their children are surviving,
Life lines attached to a virtual reality world.
Viral syndrome: work, sleep, repeat;
Slowly depletes our creative potential.
Humanity failing, culture now lost.
SYSTEM ERROR!
World crashing; in 3, 2, 1...
A contest entry
- Prewrite Heaven by Heavenly Angel.
700 points, ended March 27, 76 entries
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A fine, unique piece this is!
I like the diversity in this one!
Well done
Thank you for sharing and for being part of this contest
The best to you -
oh how horrable life without internet...cant live must have! oh god i loved the end it made me think "holy crap internet dont fail me now"
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unique, original...
"world crashing; in 3, 2, 1..." wow, love that line. this whole poem is very unique and original. i love it. your style is nice, and really shines through here. this is piece is super interesting... the beginning made me laugh, and i don't know why, but i truly have some issues. good luck in all the contests. do you mind if i put the last line on my page? thanks -
Contemporary and refreshing, and sadly, so true. Nice personalisation of cliches. Great job!
Best of luck and thanks for entering!
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Very interesting write you have here... I like your style... Very interesting
Thanks for entering and
Best of luck
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This is a great write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
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