I cry tears of deepest red
I am the weeping rose
I know many truths
that others cannot know
If they did their world would crumble
and I the cause of the fall
I would be living, breathing chaos
the writing on the wall
I am the sweet scent of the rose
the bitter taste thats left behind
I am the hate that lets you kill
the love that makes you blind
I am the caring you see in those
who let you give love a try
and I am the hot tears apon your cheeks
that are always left behind
I am the moments so joyous
that they just cant be fake
I am the cold steel upon the wrist
letting loose Crimson comfort,
For every moment you cant take
I am the newborn infants cry
death's whisper on the wind
I am the beginning...
and sadly I am the end.
A contest entry
- Just about anything by my1lovewearsdiapers.
600 points, ended July 22, 2008, 46 entries
Honorable mention
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thats awesome cameron
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this is sad but so f-ing good. wow. its powerful too. keep it up cam!!
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"I am the sweet scent of the rose
the bitter taste thats left behind
I am the hate that lets you kill
the love that makes you blind"
excellent job. thank you very much for entering -
Interesting write. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
♥
whisper
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aww sad :(
it was really sad a death of a baby it makes me cry
very good though
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Added to my favs
I look forward to seeing more from you in the future. Keep writing. -
shiggity-shweetness
LOVED IT.
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enjoyed your poem. Very creative and compelling. best of luck in the contest
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Awesome!
Love this one had to read it again! -
this is great. I love the concept you have played with here. Speaks to a collective consciousness, where you are apart of everything, life and death. Well done.
and thanks for your comment
creatress
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u dont suck ur good keep writing!!!
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Wow!
Speechless!
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Great Job
You wrote it in such a way that I was compelled to read on. 23-24 and 18-20 are my favorite lines. -
very good poem. deep and emotionla that is your style.
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Where did you get the inspiration for this??
Just gorgeous... -
Beautifully written, lots of imagery as i read it, and it went somwhere, i had a couple of flow issues but on the whole it read really nicely, i think if you looked at your syllable count, you might be able to get it to flow perfectly, but thats just me, i have a thing about syllables, all in all Anubis, loved it.
Michael
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nice, excellent and very deep, love the flow*does swooshy thing from earlier*
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