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The True Meaning of Baseball




Crazy Eddie sold beer nuts at Veteran's Field
back when a man was a man
and a woman was a tomato

Dodge vans curled along the ridgeline stuffed
with migrant workers
promised some real relaxation

Jim and me drank beer in the bleachers
ate peanuts, watched the second baseman
stealing signs of the apocalypse from the catcher

The road to the stadium was a long Via Delarosa
for those poor wetbacks
tar baby eyes weary with hope

Their first baseball game
their first exposure to the National Pastime
"Look!," I cried, pointed my ball park frank

All heads turned
The Outfielder, a well known bonus baby
had clobbered a sinking slider

It sailed like a bat
out of the park
across the Rio Grande, the aliens cheered like crazy

That night we drank with Oaxacan grape pickers

Sinaloan chicken pluckers, Yucatucan taxi drivers
at Rosa's Cantina


"Explain hombre", they begged,
moustachio's foamed with Coronas,
"the true meaning  of baseball"

I thought about it

the earth shifted, crosses smoked and turned to ash
"Jackie Robinson," I finally said, "stealing home"

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  • toomysterious
    May 23, 2008

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    Wow! I love baseball and this poem simply blew me away. Now I have to mark you as a favorite and come back to read some other time or I'll be reading til dawn. Loved your ending line. Bravo!


  • Zayra Yves
    April 29, 2008
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    This is a very descriptive story. Great! I really enjoyed the details.


  • funpum
    April 29, 2008

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    Great

    A real feeling of place and identity -and displaced identity. Love it.

    Just curious -the painting on your author page, is it entitled with champagne? 'Cos it isn't champagne colour or a champagne glass.


  • NurseChilly gold member
    April 26, 2008

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    I know jack-shit about baseball being a Brit... but I know good plumery and this is good plumery hun.. it's got balls...

    yepp

    and grit... yepp

    me likes

    sand in my shoes ...........

    G.x


  • Lute
    April 25, 2008
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    Sinking slider would be a spitball, in all likelyhood.

    (I cannot watch anymore, somehow, the "elan", the electricity, even the eccentricity is gone. Bland it is. I wonder if these days we see too deeply into the heroes?---well, us old codgers anyways.)


  • malmadre gold member
    April 25, 2008
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    I love your story~telling talents! and I speak blue collar too does that make me bilingual...but I don't speak baseball, which sure has changed since the days of Jackie Robinson. I know less about baseball than the pickers, pluckers and taxi drivers, but I do know that Smoltz is doing great right now. Again.. great story!


  • ariosto gold member
    April 25, 2008
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    Just a thank you to those who commented and an explanation for L7
    I ain't illiterate!

    It was intentional, trying to make the narrator a somewhat blue collar sort

    Maybe it don't work huh?

    ;-)

  • Cup-a-Joe silver member
    April 25, 2008
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    Excellent Visual

    Im with you there David, a woman is a tomato!!
    Joe


  • Amera gold member
    April 24, 2008
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    Well! You are a master story teller. I loved this from the intoneation and flavor to the visiual images you have painted. I thought this was perfectly smooth except for one line. You made me stop dead in L7 because of the pronoun error. "I drank beer" not "me drank beer".

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe silver member
    April 24, 2008

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    This is really wonderful...My grandfather who just passed use to hand out tickets at SportsMans park in St.Louis ..sighs those were the days of real men...
    He would have loved this write...
    Thank you for sharing...
    Many blessings
    ~A~

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