I hear the silence in my head,
Like Screams in the Dark,
Sadness, Loniness,
So far from where you are,
I cut myself to feel the pain,
So I know I'm still alive,
Without you I feel so numb inside,
When you left you took my heart ...
No I dont want it back..
and as I lay bleeding,
I see the crimson floor,
I wonder..What"d I do this for,
When u see me lying,in my pool of blood,
what do you feel ,what do you see,
I hope you see what you did to me..
and when you cry cause I'm gone I hope you understand..
When you left you stole my life...Make you feel like a man?
This cold pale skin , this red all around me
Every single thing I did is for you,
Look, Now, See what you made me do..
A contest entry
- ALMOST ANYTHING GOES by VerminVomit.
303 points, ended May 5, 2008, 47 entries
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I don't think I could ever feel spite or bitterness or want someone I love to feel hurt for me/becasue of me/to make me feel better.
If love were a tyrant, I guess im the toilet it'd use on them days of too much spicey food and lite beer...
Anyhell, again, another good write.
-cheers
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Phenomenal beggining, common end
the first 2 lies are the best...opposites feel like similaritys almost...
i cut to forget about the pain...well i cut so i forget the pain of my feelings and only feel the blade cutting through my flesh
i wrote this part after reading the whole thing
well i see poetry like the end of this a lot... its nothing special now... but the begging was awesome -
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ahh sorry it took me so long to reply , Thanks for the feedback might work on it a bit more
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