Do you see my eyes?
Do you see the tears I cry?
My eyes hide so much.
People see my eyes and
all they see is joy.
But if you look you can
see how they've changed.
They used to be so bright
and now they are so dim.
They used to show all my happiness.
They were such a bright blue.
People used to say her eyes are
so beautiful they look almost fake.
Do you see them now?
They look so happy.
Like there's nothing wrong.
But do you believe them?
They just show a bunch of lies.
They hide my sadness, my pain,
and all the madness.
They started out so blue and then
things started to go so very bad.
First someone I love so much died.
I cried so much.
Thats when they started to dim.
When I thought things were going
to get better they just got worse.
It wasn't even 2 years later.
My parents split up and got a divorce.
I cried even more.
My eyes started to fade so much more.
Now there are arguments
all the time.
Not just from me,
but from the others in this house.
It always makes me cry.
So my eyes are still changing.
I hate this feeling so much.
They hide all my troubles from
this world so people can't
see what I have gone through.
All my sadness all my pain.
I try not to cry,but it is so
hard knowing what my brother,me
and my sisters have gone through.
These eyes will always hide my
anger and the things that
make them this way.
This horrible gray.
So next time you see
my eyes will you see the
sadness and pain?
Or will you still see
the joy they make to
hide all the pain and to make
it seem like my sadness has
gone away?
I pray to get rid of this
saddening gray.
I want the brightness
to come back.
But most of all I want my eyes
to tell no more lies.
Author notes
option 2!
A contest entry
- Anything Goes....Or Does It? by lowercase prelude.
1500 points, ended July 8, 2008, 62 entries
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This poem is about my heart and the hearts of others who have gone through the same or worse! please comment.
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I'm one of those people who believes that the eyes are the window to the soul, and because of that belief i found this poem to be so heartbreakingly sad and touching. I think your words show not only a raw emotion, but a pleading from the heart to take away whatever pain you have gone through, making it, as i said, a very touching piece.
I think too, because it is directly from your heart (and you can tell you feel your own words) that it has a natural flow and feeling to it, and the fact that it is a personal story (im really sorry for what you have gone through in order to write this) i think it really draws the readers in, however I think people will also be able to connect to it on a personal level for themselves, because it is one of those poems that you can easily relate to.
sad, heartbreaking, but beautiful write. Thank you for entering my contest, and for sharing your work! -
I love how you've somewhat given a character to the eyes. The way you've penned this was great and you did well at showing your pain and emotion.
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=[ sad. but its really really good!
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it's truly anguishing to read!
I wish that Divorce wasn't so painful on our loved
ones..but living in anger and love loss is truly worse.
May your words heed all our hearts.
and kindly I extend to you...a warmth of understanding.
Please remember these are not your problems to solve,
time...give us time..we parents are flawed and human
too!
you wrote this piercing and smartly done!
ripped through our hearts!
way to write!
ears/Seattle
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hmm
that is awesome and I know exactly how that feels! keep writing and don't stop! lol your friend,star -
Very Deep
This is a very deep poem, they say the eyes are the windows to our souls, wonderful write, thank you for sharing and keep them coming.
raingoddess
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Awwww! i am so sorry hun! great write and i do encourage you to keep on writing. I would go down the "Others have had it so much worse than you " route, but I think that is so mean to do to a person, so i am going to say, "I am sorry and I wish I could make it better for you and take back your loss." so glad you are in our group! Contact me anytime you wish to chat. tty
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wow. thats so beatutiful and sad. i hope things get better. i can really relate to that. good poem.
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I Understand
i hate it when i think that i have to be tough and i cant cry.
great poem. ill pray that things get better
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Perfectionist is what they call me.
I comment truthfully and honestly, so please don't mind if im rude.
This poem is very very well written, if its from the heart it will always sound beautiful, your grammar is.. Decent but your wording and imagery is very nicely typed.
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This is very deep and I loved the way you worded this. So simple with the words but such a complex message. Great write, I loved it.
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Deep and passioante
in so many ways with your expressions. Thank you for sharing with us.
All the best,
Ephiphany
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wow my favorite never knew this..they r good hiders huh..loved ur write...it tells soo much..
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Wow
This is an amazing poem. It spoke out to me very powerfully, and I can just see all the things your going through. It's very painfull.
"but most of all I want my eyes/to tell no more lies"
Those two lines are my favorite. I know what it's like to hide things from people and be tired of it. Well written poem, and a pleasure to read it.
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i loved it and it showed a very deep feeling. I hope things get better for you and yours. good write and stay strong
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nice
awesome poem! your a way better poet then me! why can'y i write like you? I envy you! =-) lol bye,star
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I just write poems that are on my heart thats all and you shouldn't envy me. your poems are as good as mine.
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This is very good. Eyes are the window of the soul. I think you did a very good job. My eyes had become far to shiney, and looked as though I were on the verge of tears all of the time.
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Yes, I do
I'm not sure its because I have blue eyes or maybe its just a good poem with a unique take. I think the brightness in my eyes have dimmed in time. Thanks for the read.
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wow.... that was so deep. i think that was the best youve done yet. very descriptive and i loved the flow!! im sorry your eyes are like that.. i wish i could help.. it was a great write!!
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