Everyday is a test for me to survive...
Never ending challenges to make me thrive.
It builds up on my patience and persistence,
To help make sure that I can go the distance.
Have to make sure to win each fight...
I can never sleep sound at night.
On silent nights I lie awake,
Never get to a brake.
Well...There's no rest for the wicked,
Everyday, every way got to prove who's the sickest.
Throwing every challenge in your face,
Have to make sure to win each race.
I've become paranoid, in my battle-hardened life,
Going day-to-day in constant strife.
Always on the edge never getting to rest,
I'm only alive to prove that I'm the best.
There's not a challenge I can't take,
Even once my bones snap and break
After one challenge ends the next begins,
If I want to stay alive then I have to win.
Well...There's no rest for the wicked,
Everyday, every way got to prove who's the sickest.
Throwing every challenge in your face,
Have to make sure to win each race.
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Whos the sickest?
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I don't like the rhyme here.
It seems like the whole point of some of the lines is just to keep up the rhyme it takes away some of the meaning. I like teh repetition but a lot of this poem seems really awkwardly worded.
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Good luck
Nikki -
"Well...There's no rest for the wicked,
Everyday, every way got to prove who's the sickest."
Loved the fact that you repeated this stanza, almost like the chorus of a song, because it stands out the most and makes the most intense statement among the rest of the poem. Everything else is explanation comparatively.
I could've gone without the rhyme, but that's okay. Interesting poem that digs into human nature itself. Nice job and thanks for entering. -
great write
keep pennin
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Your good!!!!!!!!!!
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hype for thsis was good. the poem was friggin kick ass. and it is befting of hell not just befiting elll. get an education. nice poem. very kick ass!
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