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Love Me Not

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Depression. Betrayal. Lost.

All those words conjugated in one; Love.

 

I can't deny it anymore. Suspension. Attention.

I can't evade this no more. Confusion. Illusion.

 

And I need him more than I ever thought I did. Falling. Crashing.

And I fear for this heart to shatter again. Calling. Trashing.

 

Patch me up with hopes and dreams and shatter me whole.

Fill me until I can't hold it anymore; you know I'm easy at falling.

 

I can't take this anymore. Why her? Why?

Depression. Conclusion. Sedation.

 

 

Unspoken words remain in forgotten looks and regretful smiles;

While you walk away and I mourn your goodbye and my lack of will.

Could've. Should've. Didn't. Won't. Never.

 

 

Somehow I knew this would lead to another goodbye and lingering hope.

Somehow I knew you'd walk away without saying one word.

 

Distortion. Commotion. Division. Submision.

Goodbye. Remorse. Heart's at pain. Heart is gone. Heart is done.

 

 

I'll leave this hope forsaken. This pain I must evade and yet forget.

And I can't but must try. Misery. Damage. Restrained. Remained. Frozen.

                                         ~♥~

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

"I can't love what was never mine...
So why do I still love you, if you left my heart to die?"- XXVampireeyesXX

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Comments

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  • Luis
    July 1, 2008
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    AAAA ME ENCANTA PERO LO DE LOVE ESTA SAD PERO ME ENCANTAAAAAAAAAAAAA


  • Carolyn
    June 17, 2008

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    I really like the way it was written.
    Its different then any i have ever read.
    It really puts emphisis on the words, making it so much more powerful


  • Chelsea Void
    May 29, 2008

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    This piece feels like notes that could be used to create a fantastic poem oozing with power. Potential.
    a couple spelling errors to change too


  • Confuzzled1
    May 13, 2008

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    I like the single words and teh order they were written it made it powerful to me like it was alright then getting worse. Another good poem yay ur pretty good =)


  • BabyBun silver member
    May 8, 2008
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    Not my usual cup of tea but I do like it alot. Thanks and good luc


  • Lonely Christina
    May 8, 2008
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    powerful and emotional write1 i really like this one.


  • allfall4u
    May 6, 2008

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    Wow..... Amazing

    I can feel what you're saying.
    I know exactly what all this feels like.

    My favorite lines:
    And I need him more than I ever thought I did. Falling. Crashing.

    And I fear for this heart to shatter again. Calling. Trashing.

    The ryhme went great and I know how it is to feel like you need someone you really don't.

    Great job... I love it.


  • Candy Morphine
    May 5, 2008

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    And I need him more than I ever thought I did. Falling. Crashing.

    Patch me up with hopes and dreams and shatter me whole.

    Fill me until I can't hold it anymore; you know I'm easy at falling.

    And I fear for this heart to shatter again. Calling. Trashing.

    -my favourite lines!

    wow this was amazing. not just good amazing...but excellent amazing!!

    im not even sure how to put it.

    but it was amazing .

    i wish one day i could write like you!.

    i both admire and envy your talents!


    • Re-invention silver member
      May 5, 2008
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      aww thanks sweety... I don't consider myself so great as some of you paint me but I guess I write from the soul which is why some writes are so amazing as you call them.... Aww have faith, you will be a great writer, if you wish it... lol thanks a lot for your comment I appreciate it!


  • i love him2012
    May 2, 2008
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    damn your really good i can see everything you right and it hurts...lol in a good way


  • MrsJones
    May 1, 2008
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    Very creative, I liked this. Thanks for entering.


  • weallhaveissues
    April 30, 2008
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    I really love your poem. I don't believe in true love anymore. But a lot of people don't


  • MyEndurance
    April 30, 2008

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    I empathise...

    Love truly is mind boggling...I'm feeling more and more there is no such thing, never was to begin with

    Hmmm...moving!


  • dreamdragon6484
    April 29, 2008

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    WOW

    I think you have truely caught in this write.
    You and I must be kindred spitits. For I believe true love only exists in the movies!!!
    I have some broken heart poems as well feel free to read them if you want.

    great write!
    have a good day
    blessed be

  • DarkRomantic113
    April 25, 2008
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    Great job portraying love on the darker side. However, the beauty love is not all dark.


  • Lil-Bit Crazy
    April 25, 2008

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    awwwwwwwwwww

    crying and hugging you.....

    i love this poem.. it is very good but sad

    huggers to you............


  • beautifull-ugly228
    April 25, 2008

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    Wicked

    It was amazingly beautiful.....hun i loved it it really got to me i havent seen a lot like this before well come to think of it the way u wrote it ive never seen before lol.

    i love the one word vocabulary that u use its pretty awesome i like the phrases at the end i know the quote in ur authors notes isnt part of it but i like that part to so anyways good write !!!!!!!!

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