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Reaper Response (My Life for Yours Saga VI)

Be careful, human, of what you say,
And remember who you are talking to.
I am, and I shall always be,
You are for now, but soon shall not be.
I was here before creation.
I was here, before the dawn of time.
I was there, when heaven was started,
I was there, when hell began.
You speak to me as if I am like you.
I have no equal, I am truth.
Beware of your insolence, beware of your pride,
For I will take her, and bury you alive.
Care, why care, emotion is not mine to have.
I don't care of your love, I don't care of your life.
A deal is a deal, and you must adhere.
Or I swear there will be hell to pay.
I am HE, the one, the only,
And I promise nothing, that I cannot deliver.
You are human, you wreak of emotion.
I devour emotion, I take and I break
Who are you to tell me what you will not do?
Do you think you can stop me?
Go On and Try.
For one will be taken, that you can't deny.

I am not evil, I only take what I seek, 

So stop your insolence, stop being weak.

I'll tell you this, and to this you must bend

A deal is a deal, and your life, or hers,

Is at this moment forfeit, is now at an end.

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Death responds to the lover's ranting.

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  • Evenstar gold member
    October 8

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    Yes,harsh and rigid it is,as well as arrogant and fool-hardy. Death reminds me of a cold-hearted businessman who cares for nothing but his work and his deals. An appropriate association. If you're wondering if i'm going to comment on every one, yes,i am. Nothing better to do,and the time is well spent here. Enjoyed reading once again.


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    August 12

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    I love the tone of this, kinda harsh and ridgid, really gives the poem texture


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