I am sheltered in
the cave of your love,
a firefly's glow
behind a white
zinfandel waterfall,
your hollow
filled.
A contest entry
- BLOW MY MIND! by Tam.
700 points, ended May 7, 2008, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Return read sent me back to the brevity and beauty of this golden gem. You, my dearest Poetess,are one creative,clever,classy writer. Apologies for the system does not allow me to applaud again.
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Cheers! I just dropped by to sip up another lesson in fine poetry... Red or white, it was a very fine year...
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thank you
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MINDBLOWING!!!
oh how I LOVE this write...
beautiful and succinct...PERFECTION!
Bravo my beautiful lady...this is yet another stellar example of your talent!
Thank you for sharing your time and talent with me! I’m delighted my three favorite things inspired your Muse...
Blessings! Tammy
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another exceptional piece! love the brevity of this and the flow is just awesome.
thanks for sharing sweetheart
HENSLEY
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You changed from red to rosé, you need a white one now
This is just so lovely. I really like the brevity of your poems and the intense feelings and images you bring with them.
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this is just really wonderful ... it is a potent little poem with huge and glorious images ... it is such a subtle yet poignant metaphore, yet serves itself well as a simple observation... your images of the firefly and cave and the waterfall ... of wine!!! yet!!!!! ... such a bravado of an image ...
like, wow
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The last two lines were the best. You really know how to end your poetry with a bang. Amazingly beautifu. ^.^
~Cassie
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Tim and Tam are two of my favorite things...ahem I mean people
Are you drinking alot of wine these days? Cause that is 2 with wine references in them...lol.
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Oh my how did you know that was my favorite wine
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Like Monte, I'm a red bloodied lass and prefer a good chilean caberner sauvignon... or a rich shiraz. but i can see the route of zinfandel to the heart of the matter so to speak
lubblyjubbly stuff
Gilly.x
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Stunning...! You have a way of writing subtle sensuality that few can equal. Good luck in the contest!
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So many times I use the taste and memories of sweet wine in my poetry. As always you left me to sigh...
~Sonja~
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love the use of the wine in this context....
great poetry! good luck in the contest.
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Wow!
Such a way with words as always!
Thanks for sharing yet another amazing piece of art!
You're a very talented soul, shine on poetess!
Much love and light, Timothy
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Beautifully pennned poetry, pure expressionism. Kudos.
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I think you have taken a very restricted set of paramaters, and worked a very effective sensual piece! I also love this title. It is a lovely introduction to the piece, but after the piece is read, the
sensual impact is exponential. Geo
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whatever research i should have done on this, i spent marveling at the word chalice and its enticing significance. i remember when i thought white zin was the best wine ever. now i wouldn't even wash my feet with it - the rest is solid and devine.
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Like most men, I like to have the hollows and caves of love of my favorite women poets to be filled too. And I agree, Zinfandel can help promote such literary endeavors -- though I pretty much stick to reds. However, if I think it helps my chances evoking a "firefly's glow," I am not remiss to changing to white zinfandel. I mean, with caverns like those, one can't be too choosy about what wines get you the chance to spelunk, right?
Anyway, lovely and sensual expressions here, Tara.
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wow, great use of the prompt and a very sensual poem...
probably gonna win this one
al
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*sigh* - this should bloody well win something! - some special someone's heart, at the very least
Brilliant!
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You know that fireflies are born to find their mate, yes?
They fly around with their little lights..bright and attractive until they find their mate. Or if they don't, they die when their light goes out...
I love the use of firefly here for that reason.
We are always searching aren't we?
Beautiful, Tara
Hope you got some rest last night!
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I adore white Zin..smiles
This write is so wonderful your imagery leaves one with the feeling of floating...
Many blessings with this beautiful write..
~A~
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fireflies are one of my favourite things, too.
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Love the new title and editings Beautiful
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A white zinfandel is also sort of a 'rose' colored wine.
thanks, that saved me going seasrching to see what that meant i will try it one time, though when i think of rose wine and think eek it is like drinking flowers lol a good poem.
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Ok
20 words to perfection! It's gold for sure!!
Joe
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I like these short ones of yours and this one is just lovely, Tara!!
~ Nicolette
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This is so perfect!! Beautiful I don't think "white zinfandel" is necessary here... but as its one of the prompt words, yeah... it's ok, lol. If I were you, I'd change it to something else, after the contest is over, and this poem wins gold
This is PERFECT. I want to write like you when I'm 33
- namita
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You write so well. Good luck in the contest.
CaliOkie
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Lovely dear, so...deep in its meaning.
Love and peace always,
mj.
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love it...gentle and sensual
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Love the last part. You always leave me with such pretty pictures.
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Oh how pretty!!! What a lovely image you portrayed with this!
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