Hand in hand
we gazed into
the other's soul
muting
the crowd
before us
beautiful silence
as we whispered
our words of eternal
life
Happier
than the Bride and Groom there
did we seem
even tho we knew
we could never be
Groom and Groom
Author notes
Maybe one day...
A contest entry
- Quickie! Word Prompt by Lotus-Mama.
550 points, ended April 28, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Fantastic Dreams by broken.inside.xx.
525 points, ended May 9, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Beauty Contest by BlackSwan.
425 points, ended May 4, 2008, 25 entries
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Comments
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tho --> though*
its aight, you were so focused on your art that you didnt realize. we all make mistakes quite fine love.
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Very sweet poem, I would have appreciated the poem more if the words were spelt more correct,
but all in all sweet poem
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whoops! ok, caught "beautiful"..........where there any others you noticed?
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this is a fantastic write!
I was not expecting the ending at all,
it was such a wonderful twist!
great write, and good luck in my contest =]
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thank you very much
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I do like this one, simplicity walking hand in hand with poetry, it certainly has the emotion I was after. Well done
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This piece left me speechless. Even before the surprising ending- which only made the piece MORE powerful. Slow, delicious words of love strung together. Amazing write, my friend!
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thank you, a great prompt that I am passionate about!
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