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What The World Means

Someday not far away
One day we all might be saved
From those moments
The one's that are filled with despair

Some way when you can pray
It's one way to mean what you say
There are moments
When we will finally share

And then we all may finally see
What the world means to you and me

So how come we don't know what we've done
Because no-one is the total of some
Who are lazy
They don't know what to do with their time

Some one will eventually come
And that one will save us all from
The bitter disappointments
The one's that keep us all in line

And then we all may finally see
What the world means to you and me

And then we all may finally see
What the world means to you and me...

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  • aboomer silver member
    May 2, 2008

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    I like your depth in this, although for me, the repeated wording cut into the 'punch' of this write. I do like your repeat at the end, though - it stood out the main thoughts and tied it all together.
    thank you for your entry
    best wishes


  • Heavens Child
    April 29, 2008
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    Nicely written, with some interesting thoughts. Best wishes and thank you for entering my contest.