Daily our struggles summons strength
Personal accomplishments we seek
A continuance in the face of impenetrable mystique
Conditions a life of tolerable solitude
In others we see elemental attributes
Our eyes behold in others an ease of life
Confidence which radiates from their moral fiber
A sense of belonging, to integrate
Wondering do I belong, to appropriate
Author notes
Lady Dragonwyck and I partnered on this.
A contest entry
- Vines Intertwining - A Collaboration Contest #75 by Ronald Wiseman.
5250 points, ended July 20, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is a good tight piece that twines thought beautifully. I would, however, remove the background or use the woman as a border only. The current tiling of the woman makes your poem difficult to read, and it truly is worth reading.
I think the word summons should be summon.
This is truly a wonderful collaboration of thought that uses such strong lines. It is precisely these strong lines that make this use of brevity work so well.
Wonderful wonderful verse. Thank you for your entry and best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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very nicely done!
good luck to the two of you in the contest.
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A beautiful collaboration. "Daily our struggles summons strength"...how true.
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Very nicely done..a true measure of wisdom found in the words. Great Job for both of you. It is fun to pair up with someone and see what you come up with.
I like the background goes great with the write almost as like you are giving depths to here thoughts and expression
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If I hadn't known I'd never have guessed this was written by two people; you write with one mind.
Peace Georgia
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nice
well written keep up the good work
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