I know its hard but we'll get through.
I'm banging on a steel door to get to you.
After all, I'll just end up burried under your feet.
Search for me. Reaching up to you through the darkness I can't beat.
I waited for you but you didn't care for me.
Nine lives kept.nine bullets spent.All spent on me.
The faces looking down on me in my new dark box.
Nobody knows. The reverand just sits there and talks.
I look up with my tired eyes and pale white face.
I scream as loud as I can, but they all keep pace.
Pretty flowers and my brand new black dress.
Then I couldn't find you in all this mess.
They put me down in the ground and I was under your feet.
Search for me. Reach down and then I'll pull you head-first.
Scream for me. Strech out your hand and then we'll fall down.
Stay with me. Scream. We'll dance then,new and black. Reach for me.
Author notes
option #3
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A contest entry
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Comments
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good write...have fun int the contest and goos luck
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sad
sounds like it could be what most people think when they're getting buried. excellent write, but wish you could've used a different color font. the black against your background doesn't really flow with it...too dark, could barely read it but still good. think about changeing the color to maybe a shade of red? either way it's up to you. great job anyways.
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Great poem it had tons of emotion and i liked it alot. thanks for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck.
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Intese! i can see the drama unfolding. I am listening to a song that makes this just all the better great write and vest of luck.
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Wow, this is intense. So dark and very deep and beautifully written.
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its really good! keep it up! ^^
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Before I read this, could you please put the option # in your AN? Thank youuu
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love it. really good.
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Wow!
This poem is so dark and beautiful, it fit's the mood... very, very nice. -
Wow...this is a very dark poem but I really like it. =)
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hun this is so sad and dark...but i loved it, you did an awesome job with this!!!
mum
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This is really good!
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This is so sad. I'm guessing that in this you died for someone, or by someone. I'm guessing for. Nice right.
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Really dark, But in a good way. I like this alot. Thanks for contributing this to the reading list as well.
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Wonderful Write
Sounds like a song, small one
Fantastic
Simon
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The dark tone is pretty well set, you managed to put the despair and sadness in it very well! I liked the beginning more than the end, but maybe that's because I just prefer rhyming poems (though I know that poems don't necessarily have to rhyme)
Keep it up I'd like to read more!
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yeee
thank you. didnt expect u to say that much.
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i liked this.. it was very dark but kool.keep writing
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