(Hook/Chorus)
Burning hot under these streets
cuz' you know who we are
we're the under stars –
When the ice losses it shine these words will still be mine
cuz' you know who we are
we're the under stars –
These dreams may not be in lights but it’s alright
cuz' you know who we are
we're the under stars –
{Verse 1: Moluv}
the magnificent manifestation of the street
blocks burn as I show my yearn for the heat
styles so unique, not parallel but oblique
dripping with intellect like a faucet with a leak
creating diabolical delusions and contusions
dream fusions accommodate optical illusions
of midnight marauders masquerading in the dark
paper chasing plotting another hit in the park
the next victim, they get them, the next shot, they got them
the glock nine just popped them, their body laying there rotting
missing their wallet, a gold watch and the chain
replaced with lead bullets and a blood stain
the chains remain but we do a lot to hurt ourselves
losing our chances to change our health and our wealth
we’re killing each other, brothers locked behind bars
if we don’t change then we’ll be sleeping with the fish
under the stars
(Hook/Chorus)
Burning hot under these streets
cuz' you know who we are
we're the under stars –
When the ice losses it shine these words will still be mine
cuz' you know who we are
we're the under stars –
These dreams may not be in lights but it’s alright
cuz' you know who we are
we're the under stars –
{Verse 2: B-Tha-1Da}
B, T, H, A, im your wonder come on respect it bitch
Y’all know its just me bringing knowledge to the ignorant eye
Like glasses made of space and time
The quantum mechanics of this rhyme
Shatters dimensions of limited perceptions
Can’t categorize me been this way since conception.
They say "he got something extra that makes him so good"
like MSG Chinese food from the hood.
maybe I was born in the wrong place and wrong time
when scheming about the impossible I feel just fine,
I'm that number one alchemist a lyrical chemist
turning words into gold with an amoral finish.
Young gifted I’m need to be lifted
Shake the world like the fault lines just shifted
This is just a little about me
a burning under star heated to a millions degrees,
Why pull that ordinary trigger
When I can fire platinum as an extra ordinary Nigga
(Hook/Chorus)
Burning hot under these streets
cuz' you know who we are
we're the under stars –
When the ice losses it shine these words will still be mine
cuz' you know who we are
we're the under stars –
These dreams may not be in lights but it’s alright
cuz' you know who we are
we're the under stars –
{Verse 3 : SoAlmostThere}
I got sick realness you callin Dr.Phil asking bout an illness
Fool if skills could kill I’d be on death row in minutes
But my swagga so fast they wouldn’t catch me bitch
In 2 seconds you hear a blast see ya heart as it drips
Now you laying on a slab for fuckin with this
Aye like he said he’s the Khemist
But mess with me I’ll slice ya dead I’m Malishez
Don’t dare ask for no head I’m liable to bite that shit
Talkin bout makin bread I’ll put yo ass on the corner like I’m a PIMPstress
Treat you like you a foreigner throw you on a boat like slave owners did
You callin for yo boys I’ll gag you kid/
Think a barretta is a toy try a 9 with a clip
Punks like yall we destroy so hold back ya chips
We’re too strong to knock down catastrophic
Loans to pay down for running ya lips
When the cards fall down you stuck with one queen we got four aces
(Hook/Chorus)
Burning hot under these streets
cuz' you know who we are
we're the under stars –
When the ice losses it shine these words will still be mine
cuz' you know who we are
we're the under stars –
These dreams may not be in lights but it’s alright
cuz' you know who we are
we're the under stars –
Author notes
Specail thanks too Moluv10 and SoAlmostThere for their verse, I did the chorus and everything came together well. I hope you all enjoyed it.
In a list
A contest entry
- Please, I want your best! by Cat10.
850 points, ended May 3, 2008, 62 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~ pre-writes ~ by LadyUnique.
300 points, ended May 8, 2008, 61 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - anything & prewrites!, as short, long, freewritten or rhyming as you wanna be! by wendymolly.
690 points, ended June 14, 2008, 55 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - All-time Best Rhyming Prewrites by TabbyCat.
600 points, ended September 23, 2008, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I really liked this one, best one i have read yet, though i do wish the credit was yours alone. I liked the flow, could see the style very tupac... Thanx for the entry and good luck
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Thank you for your entry in our contest. An interesting poem with an unusual rhyme scheme, as a song it will work very well, but we feel as an entry for this contest it doesn't have the rhythm and flow that we require.
We wish you all the best, should this song ever be recorded.
Sue and Jeff
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Good i like it alot thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck..
..<3..
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This knocked me for a Loop!
I have to say I enjoyed the 3rd verse absolutely the most, overall, though this is very well written rhythmically! It demands to be read a few times in line to adopt a greater effect! It just gets better in the read through!
And that will absolutely make you a finalist! 
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Sorry I did not comment.
It is a great song.
Almost too long for me to read. That is why I did not comment. I was not done reading it at the time.
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i really like this especially this bit... 'why pull that ordinary trigger when I can fire platinumb'. to me this says that words are the most powerful weapon. of course that may not be what was meant at all
into the finalist list this goes and good luck from there
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Excellent
What a terrific creation for the contest. So very well expressed. Best of luck in the judging.
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sweeet
loved readin this whole rhyme, class writing style, good luck - domz
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This collaboration has good flow. The styles interlink in synergy-ways...lots of good, real-world impact stuff. Good luck in the contest.
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I was really feelin' this collabo...I think this all just flowed together quite nicely. The 1st verse has to be the strongest, but the last two verse just bought the whole song/lyric together....like PB&J.
Overall I love the Rhmye...I haven't been to excited about any Hip Hop songs lately...and reading this I know there are some true lyrcist out there who have talent.
Much love and good luck in the contest
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I think you all did great on this. Moluv10 you were on point with the flow and B-Tha-1DA you surprised me with that 1st line. Not used to reading things like that from you but you always catch my eye with something "A number one alchemist a lyrical chemist
turn words into gold with an amoral finish." SoAlmostThere I thought your verse was the realist. Good job and good luck!
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cuz' you know who we are
we're the under stars –
what's it mean?
this made me laugh and contemplate my life in relation to these lyrics.
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This is pretty good!
And good luck in the contest
~Lorissa~
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DEEP lyrics
I think you guys did an awesome job on this piece.
It's always a pleasure to see some Real brothers collaborate on Life as it is not Perfect. Keeping the Peace and definately Keeping it real
Much love and respect.
All the best,
Ephiphany
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you two did a great job on this! Thanks for letting me tag along. I had fun!
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Thanks for doing this with us we loved ur verse
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Well done. I agree first verse is the best. Not only were the rhymes unforced and the alliteration and monorhyme sooth, there is a sense of social awareness. Like a "wake up!" woven in. Nice.
"When the ice losses it shine these words will still be mine
cuz’ you know who we are
were the under stars – "
The 'were' here, do you mean 'were' an in the past tense of 'are' like "we are" "we were."
Or do you mean 'we're' as in "we are the under stars"/"we're the under stars"?
Just a bit confused.
Anyway, one.
Dez
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It's we're like we are
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thanks for entering! this was very interesting for me! I wasn't expecting any songs in this contests! but hey, its still a poem! great job and good luck!
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I liked the first verse the best, i found the imagery and description to be very rich and the rhyming was done very well without being forced. I think that sometimes swearing can really explain things about life and bring a realness to the poem, but i found that the swearing in this poem was way too forced and didn't bring anything extra to the poem. Some interesting thoughts, some of them i probably didn't understand, but what i did understand i thought was a great rendition to a little what the world is like and what we go through each and every day.
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We did great if I do say so myself.
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