Silvered sands adorn glowing skies
soft powders glistening in pride of Sun
and romance flies from misty eyes
at mere presence of palest one
the pull of this mystery over human history
so many good men gone astray, lost to thrills
to flames of passion a life in a sentence be:
stay with me; life as we know it comes still
like the pallid face of golden moon in June
slowly spins its subtle style, lost wills
fall to fast and swoon, heart’s music; too soon
minutes to hours, days to longer wishes fill
in autumn harvest bold, in powers untold
when resistance of men ebbs so thin, 'neath glows
and pale silver becomes currency to hold
the mind of helplessly love stricken; in shadows
oh, such longing, soft words and bare skin embrace
man simply taken, harvest-mooned without a trace.
Author notes
Photocredit: Licys and Flickr Photo
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A parody of:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3977667
In a list
A contest entry
- Changes - Parodies by gaze.
700 points, ended May 7, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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a sonnet I will remember....
Congratulations on the silver! This is the one form that I have been trying to learn. I haven't yet finished a sonnet, but this inspires me to keep working on it. You seem to have a flair for form. I love the images you created with this parody.
Don
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Looks as if you have turned that moon lady to a siren of the moon. The doom of men, or maybe men are just too weak and can't handle the charms of a lady
You did the change in such a clever way, fooled almost everyone who read this poem.
Very good work h, thanks for taking one of your lovely poems and making a parody of it.
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Thank you Gaze-
For your kind words and the honor, this was another fun contest that you do so well, bringing some much needed laughter to my AP experience...Thank you so much...h
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I already commented as Yem but this is the official comment so that the poem shows as commented on in the contest. The best entry so far btw, in my opinion anyway.
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Of course the first is a wish, I mean the original poem...the second goes by the saying, "Be careful what you wish for!" I read a poem yesterday on Old Poetry that was this one's counterpart, not in style but in the fact that it was sort of a warning about being trapped by the opposite sex. At least that is how I read your exceptionally well written poem. I'm never really sure, sometimes I tend to read what I want to read from a poem.
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Sonnets are easy, its humor that is difficult; so many fall to romance and there is a feeling of not being able to resist, the moon-the swoon; thank you for your wonderful comments...fun contest...PK
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LOL, and humor comes easy for me, it's sonnets that are impossible.
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a beautiful sonnet
your internal rhyme & enjambment are very good
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Masterpiece of Emotions
Just totally beautiful picture embraced me as I read of love, mild passion. The hope this man seeks touches all hearts growing old.....Your unique talent always amazing to read.novy
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