Grandmother's cottage
with cookies and milk.
A fire crackling
logs breaking and blistering.
Hot chocolate with marshamllows
and a blanket on a rainy day.
A hug when you're feeling down
because someone broke your heart.
These things bring me comfort
whenever i'm feeling down.
They're soothing to my sadness
though they are easily found.
They console me and bring solace
when times are damp and dark.
To me these things are one and all
an intertwining flow.
In dark times
cold times
shadowed days
and light hours
they bring me........
Author notes
Ok well this was a very fun contest and i hope i havent written crap for you to boot out : )
I hope that i haven't made it too easy for you to guess what word i am using.
I realise that i used a few of the words at the bottom of the poem and so you dont think i didnt read the rules, i didnt choose any of those words
Hope you enjoy
xoxo
A contest entry
- A Wordplay Poetry Contest by -BlackKnight-.
600 points, ended June 9, 2008, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Warmth, love? One of the two most likely.
Well... This was a pretty good poem. Perhaps a little empty. It was just words... no feelings carried with them.
Nice write though.
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Thanks
Thank you for commenting on my poem.
It was warmth. I openly admit that this contest didnt exactly appeal to my creative drive but i needed a prompt to get me back into the swing of things after not writing for so long.
The contest was fun and i wish you good luck on your next one.
xoxo
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Perhaps "warmth" or "love"?
Also, I agree with Aerialrose--the first few lines weren't too bad, but the emotions in this are rather flat because they're not fleshed out. You should describe them, bring them out into the open by showing us how they feel, rather than just telling us what they are. -
I like the beginning half the best. I think the ending half could have been better by showing us these emotions, not telling.
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I loved this
Nothing like the warm you feel at grandma's house. You did a fabulous job with the imagery, I felt like I was right there in your poem. The flow was excellent as well. Thank you for sharing such a loving write with me today.
Wishing many you many of blessings
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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This has such a warm, comfy feel to it! Great images, very descriptive and they bring a nice feeling to this read. Very enjoyable!
best wishes in your contest.
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