her life was great
even at the end
she sealed her fate
it must now end
she lost all hope
and all her dreams
she could not cope
with all the screams
torn inside
and broken out
she cried and cried
and let it out
her life is ending
full of sorrow
shes now decending
life was borrowed
Author notes
picture #1
A contest entry
- ~ pre-writes ~ by LadyUnique.
300 points, ended May 8, 2008, 61 entries
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what do u think??
Comments
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OH! this was just DEEP! i like it! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox
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Intensely dark, a great poem to read
Please credit the artist of the picture though in your Authors Notes out of respect
♥
Thank you & Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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Very simple writing style, and yet a million emotions scream from behind the words. Fine writing.
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the poem was definitely very well written. Flowed very nicely!!!
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this one really speaks alot and is very affective.
still impressed. i love the short lines.
~Madi~
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amazing
I love it. It's close to my poem Death. I still havent read any poetry like yours before. Keep on writing
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very good work.
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Wow I love your work, it always leaves me thinking and I love the way you write, dark yet meaningfull well done once again.
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Very...emotional...exactly what i asked for...it makes me think of suicide tho...which is perfectly fine...its so sad!....I love it...Pain is such a strong emotion to write about...so easy to get off topic! Great!!!
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thank you for entering and good luck
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wow i feel like i can relate to the person in the poem. very emotional piece. I love it.
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Awesome emotional piece. "Life was borrowed" is a paramount line for sure. It said so much in it's "sad but true" wisdom. You created the stark imagery quickly and without pause. It really was "The end". Great work as always.
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It makes a lot of sense
Sad, but true.
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Awesome
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WoW! that is an amzing write you can see all the emotion in this piece
you are a very talented poetess...xxx
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wow. this is a fascinating, touching, gripping piece that seemed to reach inside me and hold my heart...i dont know if that sounds wierd, but what i mean is that this was a deep powerful piece!
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i love the length of each line on this , apart from its easier to read it also gives an urgency when you read it, i also liked the way you establish the character at the beginning, and more than that how you created a wanting to know more, who she is why she is in the position shes in and so on, really nice to read and yet leaves you with a great sense of sadness, well done.
Michael
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Great flow. It said so much. It created an atmosphere of inevitable sadness. I felt as though it was like a peek into the final moments of despiar. Great write
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i love it!!!!!
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