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the view from a drummer

he beats on the drums
the sound comes out like a loud unheard scream
the crowd cheers for him
as he get on stage
only to see his passion
so Strong

 

he sleeps drain the day

cause he has no time at night

living that crazy schedule

must be tight

 

he lives on a tour bus

and tours the world

oneday he'll make it

to where hes going

 

 

hes only human

cant anyone see

he has a life

just like you and me

but he has passion

has passion for drumming

which is so strong

 

 

 





 

Author notes

lolz..i tryed..and it only took me like 10min..but ooohhhh well..i tryed tho..and i think its OK!!

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  • notorious gold member
    April 26, 2008

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    Let me just say, the background and text color really compliment the whole drummer aspect of the poem.

    My favorite lines:
    "he beats on the drums
    the sound comes out like a loud unheard scream"
    The entire point of the poem in the first 2 lines.

    Some suggestions:
    Lots of typos here...

    -'Strong' is capitalized in the first stanza for no apparent reason.

    -'oneday' is typed as one word...you forgot the space.

    -hes
    You forgot your apostrophe..should be he's.

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