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Never ending battles (To all parents)

When i call they just don't come
Makes me feel so insecure
Sometimes I feel I want to run
Instead I hide behind closed doors

I am so afraid, afraid I might die
My life going nowhere like footsteps in the sand
I shall die not of sickness nor of weakness inside
I'm just so afraid I might die by my own hand

I'm not saying I will, I'm not saying I won't
As I cannot predict my fate
I'm not saying I do, I'm not saying I don't
If only I could concentrate...

These never ending battles must stop one by one
Because if they don't you will surely lose a son

Author notes

this poem was written to my parents as a suicide note, luckily i withdrew inspiration from it instead

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  • Unbreakable3
    July 21

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    This is so true and so beautiful, parents need to realizes things more, thankyou for entering and good luck in all that you entered!


  • awitersheart
    July 10

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    Awesome

    This poem touched me I grew up going from foster home to faster home then knowing my parents, but my mother never cared no one time then back and forth to foster homes so I can really relate to this poem.
    Good poem it really hit my heart strong.


  • Diggs McGee
    July 25, 2008

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    you're not going to like my comment...
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    every kid has battles with their parents... it'd be wise to keep that in mind. Am i saying your not worse off than myself? No. What I am saying is that every kid in the world has fights with their parents. Severity aside, it's true, and you'd be wise to keep that in mind.

    But you do have a good poem there. It's a good thing you decided against suicide. Someone with talent for portraying their feelings in a vivid manner is hard to find these days. You are truly an original. Keep it up.


  • Cannonsfire
    July 25, 2008

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    I have often wondered what goes through a person's mind when this is the last thought. Of all the ones left behind who will have only the note as a final reminder. I am so pleased you withdrew as you say, because in life we all have choices, some good and some not so good, it shows basically you decided there was something good to be gained from you continuing to live. And there is my friend, a chance to help others when they feel that way, a chance to change perceptions of the world about the next generation and a time for you to write. C


  • Intricate Wordsmith
    June 15, 2008
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    Well I am glad that you decided to not continue with suicide. . .I have tried that five times and I found the Lord. Maybe you should try that.


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    June 9, 2008
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    I will take this and learn from it, so I will not make the same mistakes with my children. Please share with me what the battle is about and I would like you to know that if you ever feel like there is no one who cares. THERE ARE PLENTY HERE ON AP!!!

  • xavimills
    June 4, 2008
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    is jy befok!!!


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    June 1, 2008
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    Strong in diction.


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    May 18, 2008

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    Firstly, I'm sorry to hear the situation that caused you to write this. I, myself, have struggled with depression for years, and have also made many attempts on my own life.

    I'm glad you drew inspiration from your experience, however, I really didn't find it dark. It was more sad/emo than anything else, and it didn't really hit me. Usually, in a suicide poem, the sheer numbness can drive the reader to tears, and I didn't feel that here.

    Either way, thank you for sharing and good luck.

    Laura


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    April 28, 2008

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    Welcome to Allpoetry

    What a sad, yet thought provoking piece. Sometimes it is hard because you never really be sure where your hear is at, and as a parent neither can they..

    Welcome to the site and enjoy

    Faerie
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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 24, 2008

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    I'm glad you didn't do anything...

    This is sad and powerful! I feel you here...

    I'm always around if you need to chat. Thank you for entering this (it is over the 40 word limit but I am glad I got to read it)


  • mysticstorm gold member
    April 24, 2008
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    I very deep and sad reality too often...well written in awarness and so glad you found inspiration and did not leave this as a note...hang in there and always find the bright moment in a day to keep your mind on...honestly I have been there done it when younger...glad it did not work now...Best to you!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    April 24, 2008

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    A fantastic poem, so honest and sincere feelings. A little over the 40 words limit but beautifully penned. Good luck in the contest


  • EmmaLuLu
    April 24, 2008
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    wow!!!such a heavy heart poem. wow did ur parents ever read this?this is so true

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