Whistling winds whisper to the soldier,
Walking through a field of poppey's and clovers,
Limp in his leg as he seeks out freedom,
Blossoms Of Blood bloom - they're bleeding,
Mortar shell flowers fly down, soaring,
The field was once a place of valour and glory,
He's wounded; shot in the same place now,
One final shot fired has him face-down,
The unwitnessed death of a brave countryman,
He'll be missed by those with him since it began,
His final resting place - a flower bed,
He lays in the Blossoms Of Blood - now dead.
A contest entry
- Five (5) Titles To Inspire by Manda Kathryn.
450 points, ended April 26, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - MAKE UP A STORY ABOUT WAR! by daddy joker.
650 points, ended July 23, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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loved it thanks for entering wish you luck
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Wow a stunning piece, so worthy of gold! The imagery is awesome, a superb write, keep penning
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thanks Lady D'
Cheers for those kind words...did they make sense? lol, i'm just kidding ha ha
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"Our revenage will be the laughter of our children!
Dia dhuit ma chara,
Have t say i oved this poem and it's content. i found it very emotive and beautiful, really like an oximoran.
When i first read it the first verse reminded me of the shooting in Belaghy of Francis hughes RIP. but then i read on to discover this poor solider had died.
Anyhow, cannonsfire my friend sent me the link and i am so pleased she did. it was lovely to read this. I found the metaphor touching.
I live in Belfast and have a house in Donegal, i believe you'r from derry so you live somewhere in between lol. i used to go out with a boy from there and i used to travel a lot to there and stayed over.
Well best of luck with your writing and keep it up.
Go Raubh ma agat.
Slán
Dolores x
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Ta, Dolores...
thanks for your interest and for Cannonsfire's, i appriciate the both of your comments, they mean alot to me, Ta, go rauh ma agat.
Domz
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Tiocfaidh ár lá
Written by a true Irishman, it may have gone unwitnessed but forgotten? NEVER. Slan, Chez
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'OUR DAY WILL COME'
truth, cheers its nice that someone knows a bit af As Gaelic i thank you, Slan go fhol - domz
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i could picture this very tragic yet beautiful scene,
this poem is beautifully made again the flow and tone is very pleasing to listen to ^-^
- Kas K Bubbles
peace in chaos out
balance of both
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Peace In Chaos
Thanks, i got that people liked this but not as much as they're saying...lol, but thanks for the comment and for seeing something in the poem...One Love!
Domz
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this is amazing... even when you write of something i dont quite understand or cant really relate to it still gets me!! that just shows your endless, flawless talent.. *stands in awe of you* ^^
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awesomeness!!!
thanks again, you can really build a gys esteem y'know?
thanks again, you have no idea how happy i am that you like my writing, cheers again, domz
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I really like the imagery...doesnt surprise me that u won gold
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great poem...very emotional!
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Being as ANZAC Day was yesterday in Australia this really htis a nerve in me ... a brillant write and great take on the title
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Thank you & Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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Dominic this was really amazing, the structure, rhyme scheme was spot on, it just flows the whole way through the piece!
It was only written on one specific thing that happened, one man getting shot! But you explained it in amazing detail, very well done oul chap!
...xoxox
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BRAVO!!!! BRAVO!!!! BRAVO!!!! I love this piece!!! The use of words such as
"Mortar shell flowers fly down"
"Blossoms Of Blood bloom - they're bleeding," and
"He lays in the Blossoms Of Blood - now dead" was brilliant!!!!! Best wishes in this contest!!!!!!!! I only have one applaud left, but this deserves, at least, 3.....
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Bravo!!! Told a sad story in just a few lines!! and the image was so vivid throught the whole thing.. not many people can do that.. Well done..
Best of luck to you!
Jetleena
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