Pennies launched at the ferryman:
slumped sighs escort whispered laughter
while smiles shattered long ago fade.
Constant beats of a broken soul
elongate the shadows swallowing the sun,
bleakness erupts in tattered sobs.
Water washes silently over regrets
as false quietude is found in empty spaces ...
eyes will forever blanche optimistic views.
Author notes
I have used "Boat of Despair"
A contest entry
- Five (5) Titles To Inspire by Manda Kathryn.
450 points, ended April 26, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 5 of 5
-
This is stunning!
It is hard to pick out one part that was better than the rest as it is all good!
However, I did especially like the lines "Water washes silently over regrets
as false quietude is found in empty spaces ..."
Well done in getting the Silver My pet
-
Intensely sad and full of imagery this rushes out of the page like a wave.
An excellent write
♥
Thank you & Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
-
Well done on the amazing use of metaphor on this one. You are inspiring hun. The flow is exceptional and the diction is fantastic. Great imagery and such a creative take on a title.
-
You have amazing diction and such whimsical and sensual line of verse. I like it a lot, you have a really unique and talented style.
FAV LINE: 'Water washes silently over regrets
as false quietude is found in empty spaces ...'
AMAZING!
-BON*BON
-
You took a very incredible turn on the prompt, and it is filled with creativty. Very well done with this piece here
Adding your comment:
1 - 5 of 5
