The train is agathering speed
plans under construction
makes your heart want to bleed
fast track tears of egotistical clone
obliterated in total destruction
express train, destination unknown
devious, satanic, talented egos
stealer of poetic vitality
kids play games with Lego’s
artistically damaging mentality…..
Author notes
Option 3. Train of envy on one way ticket to oblivion.
A contest entry
- PIF PROMPT CONTEST by penman.
525 points, ended April 24, 10 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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very very very good.....lol....i loved it...good word usage and i love the middle of it..
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Thought Provoking
What a brilliant play on words. This is an excellent poem with the option you chose. That is some train ride to oblivion. Excellent write, I loved it!! Thanks for sharing,
Much Love
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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Great poem. I really loved way you took the option and made people think about egotism and how it can destroy.
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What a mouthful. Haven't been flying that fast since 1982 when I derailed. smile.
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Great write my sister dear had to read over it bit but I got it in the end always slow in the mornings need coffee fix
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Wonderful
Very well done. best of luck in the contest.
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You have my mind reeling with this one. Awesome prospective on the prompt. Well written. Best of luck in the contest.
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