There are none
{were none}
Lane picked them up
{shook them}
and tossed them out the window
{they flew}
then turned to me and smiled
{sweet smile}
and caressed the flower of my dreams
{touched down}
coaxing out the nectar of articulation
{dug deep}
in the form of poetry falling onto the page
{caught words}
I was unsure of my work, worried
{turning away}
She read my words and saw all that they meant to me
{praised them}
commented, critiqued, and kept letting me back
{open arms}
kept inspiring me to write again and again
{keep going}
gave me reason to write, reason to care
{I smiled}
But now I am unsure, hating these words
{She left}
they are pathetic, unexpressive and so wrong
{tears fell}
for displaying the depth she reached
{and touched}
and the degree to which she changed me
{loved me(?)}
I loved her, for all that she was
{still do}
and for seing in me what I could be...
Author notes
This is..not my best..by any means, but it's hard to say everything she meant and still means...please don't take offense at my rough words, but see the meaning within
A contest entry
- Dalaney...We Are Claiming Our Right to Say Goodbye by Cannonsfire.
1750 points, ended April 28, 2008, 13 entries
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Comments
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Oh I can see how Lane has touched the souls of many poets on here. Your expressiveness in how and why is very heart felt. Thank you for allowing us to read what she meant to you. Love, C



