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I wear the perfume of my sun dressed existence
with green fingers and made-up face
that adopt the dew drops of summer's last kiss.

My garden of secrets still resides

in corners that remain untouched
by outside hands not strong enough to cultivate peace

these mysteries unravel slowly
among seeds I've never sown

brought in by someone else's design.

Each flower has a point of view
and I listen to the way her breath makes me tremble

completely caught up in her bouquet of dreams

and I dig painted toes
within the combination of the qualities

she adorns.


It's then I'll fall softly upon a willow
bending to hold the shape of integrity
as I search every inch of the stems that grow
deep inside my mind.

Am I a weed
a Tulip in disguise
waiting for that rainy day
so I can step within and do the housework of my mind?

Until then
when the storm unfolds
I play in upturned soil

laid out across this fertile ground
writing my life in butterflies

pretending I've changed.




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Painting by ~ Johannes Grenness

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  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    May 18, 2008

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    This is a wonderful poem.

    You have painted a picture with words in an unusual format with your short, free verses so well spaced into thought patterns.


    You have a unique, almost abstract view which raises thoughts and leaves questions to ponder. 'Writing my life in butterflies,'...that is a wonderful way of expressing an idea. I really like this poem.


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 12, 2008

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    I keep getting 40 lines and the maximum amount on the contest specs are 36. If you can tweak, you may wish to at this point. Oh I do hope you do because this is just a gem.
    your last line pushed those tears right out.

    Simply beautiful work. Well done. ~Pamela

  • Rowan gold member
    May 5, 2008

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    Oh, loved the line; 'writing my life in butterflies' !
    This was a stunning read, so full of beauty, skill, and precious flowers.


  • Sanguinarius
    April 24, 2008

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    Exquisite !

    What a beautiful painting of words you have created here, I enjoyed it greatly. Best of luck to you. ~Bret~


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 24, 2008

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    Oh my gosh!!! This brought tears to my eyes because I see my life in those lines! Your poetry always touches me and reflects emotions and situations that I have felt.

    Absolutely outstanding!

  • seek
    April 23, 2008

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    you have so many pieces, and they all tell a story no matter what the subject. i particularly like this one because even though it's long, each stanza leads into the next..the painting doesn't hurt either- but you made the prompt into something personal and pretty ..expecially the end line: "pretending I've changed" it's a great closing..

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