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Mother, I Painted you a Picture

I painted you a picture
I am but only ten
your words so hot
it melted the canvas in my hand
and branded this memory in my head

I thought you had to love me
even when you turned against me
you reached behind me
and ripped out my spine
you watched me crumble and collapse
into a heap of skin
nails and teeth

(Funny, I still won't admit defeat)

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  • Terry Collett
    November 30
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    This has depth to drown in.

    This poem has depth to drown in. Each word and the memory it evokes opens up and lays bare. Excellent poem, Catie.


  • usefuldistraction
    March 11
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    Very strong emotional writing. Love the last line in parentheticals!


  • VerminVomit
    April 24, 2008

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    awesome

    i really like how you...like your transition is so...so... flowy...
    first i thought it was gonna be a pretty picture and was like this is pointless but you proved me wrong i love the 2nd stanza
    the 3rd line makes you look so strong, awesome...yeah...