Writhe; in sins upon crushed satin sheets.
Tattoo deep your aroma over my body,
in intense thrusts of fiery heat.
My silky skin aches,
for the whispers of your feathery caress.
Soft sensual touch,
each stroke making a flicker of heat rush.
Searing my flesh as your body burns.
Bleeding in cultured pearls of ecstasy,
as your need, slams deep, into me.
Breathing you in
in deep strokes of anticipation,
my heart thunders in time
from your seductive invasion.
As your thumbs stroke the pulse in my neck,
darts of fire shoot through to my abdomen.
White heat, blue lightning,
your body aggressive,
mouth domineering.
Lips and tongue tease;
breasts pinnacled excitement.
As my form melts,
like hot liquid between your fingers.
Submitting to each other,
as our nectar flows,
our lips lock,
in piercing screams
of orgasmic feral moans.
Author notes
"hot and needy"
Options 1&2 a mixture of both
satin sheets,feathery caress
sensual, Domination, submission
Option #4
A contest entry
- TURN ME ON! by Sylvyrwyng.
1000 points, ended May 9, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sexual Healing. ( Adult Contest ) by Poetryintheblood.
700 points, ended May 2, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Erotic/Sensual Poem/Background! Take a LOOK!!! by Zenda-Lokki.
550 points, ended December 11, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Such a sensually perfect write xx I love it xx Thanks for your entry and good luck xx
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This so sensual to read and fits nicely with the Royo picture too. Combined wow.
'Tattoo deep your aroma over my body,' is a truly beautiful line.
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Thank you so much for your lovely comment
Valued and appreciated
~sugar~
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Congratulations on the Silver ~sugar...a beautifully sensual offering.
Love Margaret
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Hi Michelle!
Well earned HM, erotica is fun for you. I enjoy reading, please keep writing.
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It is fun. I just enjoy being a little naughty.
I appreciate you reading as always
Luv ~sweetness~
x
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Thank you for your entry, Josie
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I'm still lost in the cultured pearls of ecstasy, floating somewhere along a river of extremely sensual thoughts.
You've written something beautiful and elegant, truly deserving of your place in the finalists list.
Love Margaret
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Thank you Margaret for such a lovely comment
Valued and appreciated,
Love ~sugar~
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Now that's what i call A SEDUCTIVE INVASION that would conquer any nation, indeed!
A fine piece of bedtime reading, Sweetie! Thanks SO MUCH for sharing this with me - and as I am now off to bed - with such a YUMMY poem in me head - I just may have a sweet dream tonight - instead of nightmares about you know where! GOOD LUCK in the contest with this sweet and sensual piece.
Love & Peace!
EArl.
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Thank you sweetie for yet another lovely comment. I hope your sleep was blessed with the sweetest of dreams - and not the nightmares you have been having.
Love you ~sugar~ xxx
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Great
I'm youngish so it was kinda akward... for me!! But your writing is amazing!! you should check out my stuff if you have time!! much love-Sin
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Ah yes, well done! Just erotic enough to be captivating but no where near over the top. Imagery amazing, flow was wonderful and the ending left me longing ( as it should in this type of write ). Loved it!
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My Lord....
That's what I'm talking about. Well done. Well done. Encore! -
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Thank you so much for your comment
~sugar~
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Wow
Well there's not much to say really this poem is intense that's for sure.
Besides just being intensly passionate and mind-blowing you have used eloquent phrases such as "Breathing you in
in deep strokes of anticipation,
my heart thunders in time
from your seductive invasion."
Its a fantastic poem in form alone.
xoxo
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Thank you so much for your comment
valued and appreciated
~sugar~
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Hot! Hot! Hot!
Needless and redundant, i'm sure, to say how this just burns with scalding passion. Wish there were a Venus out there for me to plays Aries with.
Sex-rated treat for all of us.
Erik
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Thank you Erik for your comment
Always valued and appreciated
I'm sure your Venus is out there somewhere
~sugar~
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*shaking my head in amazement*
Now that was hot, sis! Love the picture. That is a love-making poem, right there. Dynamite!
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That is what I was doing in my head LOL!!!
It's always a pleasure to have you read. I never know what to expect LOL!! It could be anything from mild palpitations to a full blown heart attack.
Valued and appreciated.
Love your sis, ~sugar~
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You need to highlight the words that you used from the word bank. this way I know which words you chose.
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I have added them to my authors notes
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Thank you very much. This piece is luxurious and sinfully delicious! The imagery is great, however, you might want to think about using some punctuation on this piece. The punctuation usage will enhance and emphasize things where they need it most and it will bring out the subtle flavors of this exotic masterpiece.
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I have added punctuation. Thank you for your comment and your advice. Valued and appreciated.
~sugar~
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Sugarcookie, somebody done hoodwinked your talent into this fabulous erotic write for the contest....lemme go see, if the imposter is still in effect, and creeping across the pages of AP 
Great job
Ephiphany
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What am I to do sis? Tell me - tell me is that imposter there? I will have a lok over here creeping across more pages of AP 
Nope sis no one there you are gonna have to set that trap.
Thanks for you Piffers for your fabu Diva comment, always fun to read. Good luck for tonight.
Love ~sugarcookie~x
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Fantastic imagery in every line here. Hot, deep, passionate and raw. An erotic journey indeed. Very sensual and deep this one. Brilliant writing.
Love
Wayne Leon
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Appreciate you sweetie.
Thank you for your wonderful comments that are always a pleasure to read. I am glad you enjoyed this.
Love ~sugar~xx
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