there you are
a fluttering embodiment of grace
you've added colour to my life
as you touch my eager, outstretched hands
I've treasured that one moment with you
knowing fully well that soon
you're gonna fly...
and I'll never see you again
Author notes
Inspiration: the bliss of a special love.
This poem is a particularly personal piece (pardon the alliteration). I had an experience where my true love loved someone else and it was impossible for us to share intimate moments again...
it's a bitter-sweet experience... and I am of the opinion that love lost is better than love unexperienced... enjoy!
A contest entry
- Intimacy by RunningFree.
525 points, ended May 6, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended June 25, 2008, 12 entries
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Comments
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this poem was catharsis at its thickest... so much was felt writing it :'(
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It's so beautiful to feel that connection. There's nothing like it, knowing that your heart is in pure hope and happiness, when you hold the one you adore and then if you go away, you are left feeling broken and empty and wishing you never had a heart at all in the first place.
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Such a nice mix of emotions in here and a very real voice for the speaker. It was well written and touching. Nice work and good luck in the contest.
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lovely
"a fluttering embodiment of grace". Yep, that did it for me...a lovely image contained within a well-turned phrase. Nice stuff....
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I wonder who this butterfly is in your life. It conjures up memories of those people who have touched my life for brief moments. Thanks for entering this into the contest.
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such few words can say so much sometimes. i like it. i almost thought it needed more but when i was done i was left with the right feeling if that makes sense. like i just felt the poem and it was done.
that comment sounds lame. ha. but i don't know how else to put it. -
grin*
succinct, yet beautiful
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