Just the thought of you gives me goose bumps
the reminisces of your touches sets my heart ablaze.
Late night talks that went further than most,
sharing secrets that were tossed and safely caught.
You had the voice and the swagger that sent me to ecstasy.
That style, that smile, the warmth you gave me,
made me feel brand new.
You ran chills up and down my spine, gave me oh so divine
butterflies that sent my body, mind,
and soul to an unknown paradise.
You took me away sheltered me from danger...
you found the key to my heart and took it out of its dungeon...
you released me.
It's hard to think lately; careless whispers of your name
echoes through my mind as I dream. You’re haunting my
every being, but I won't and can't deny it. I'm so addicted.
My friends say it’s a childish crush but I know what my
heart tells me. You bring out the worst in me...but I like
it. My inner demon yearns for you
like a summer night, on the beach after a
rain storm; you refresh my senses and leave me
with a forever lasting smile. Leaving me
mesmerized with your undying sense of passion.
You have broken me in. I no longer wish to be with
anyone. You're the prescription to my pain and I need
you daily. The love you give never leaves my senses...
I pray you never leave my side.
Days turn into months and here you stand. No drug
can give me the high that you give. I get so weak
in the knees around you. You're like the gentle
touch of rain on the tip of my tongue...breath taking.
Feigning for you, your love, your attention…
for ever yours…my addiction
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Toxic Peppermint
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A contest entry
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450 points, ended July 11, 2008, 77 entries
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love it or hate it, i could care less sometimes! ^_^
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After reading your last poem, I had to check out more of your stuff. This is the conclusion I have come to. Your writing style is quite unique. It seems as though you take what everyone has said before, and write it so completely different. You put beauty into simplicity. And simplicity into beauty. This poem justifies just that. This is another beautiful write. Your quite the writer.
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your comments are bringing happy tears to my eyes. thanks so much for yet another uplifting comment ^_^
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My inner demon yearn
love that line! you have written something passionate and amazing! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox -
Wow
It's absolutley wonderful and i've got to say, you most definitely deserved that gold! It's got such a wonderful flow and little romantic phrases to die for.
You've truly expressed the feeling of sweet love. It's truly hard to find such a wonderful love poem these days. Atleast one that hasn't been written fifty million times.
This is new and exciting. I love it!
Wonderful job!
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~IvoRy
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Great use of words I love the way you said what you did in this poem. you have expressed yourself well and did justices to this piece. I loved it wonderful write. you have a great talent and i have to say i loved all the lines especially the last one.
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*Sigh* :)
That was such a breath of fresh air. I haven't read a love poem like this in a while.
"sharing secrets that were tossed and safely caught."
This is the line that dragged me in.
What I love about this poem is that it has many sweet phrases that are said so perfectly, they should be cliches but are not! (If that makes any sense...)
Anyways, this was a sweet treat for my eyes (and heart). Thank you for your entry
--DAMSELx
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Hmmm.
Well, I remember this feeling.
great poem, it seems easy for you to express yourself
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Accurate, overwhelming
this is deep stuff! it is obvious that an experience of true, overwhelming love has influenced this piece. i love so many lines in this i couldn't write them all.. but i feel i've been to that "unknown paradise" before. beautiful words. oh, "my inner demon yearns for you". i just love that, i can relate to this so much. keep up the great work. -Jamie
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I love this poem ^_^. It's so amazing!!! Very nice job on it, it flows very well and you can tell how you feel. It's soo sweet!! =]
Keep up the great work!! You have a talent =]]
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Oh wow! I absolutely loved this piece, amazing choice of words and it flowed beautifully, do you have any tips for writing non-rhyming poetry?
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Awesome write my friend from the very start to the finish
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this is beautiful.... i loved your wording. it just flowed so well!!!¡
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What an awesome poem! I loved it! Lots of emotion and it has a beautiful flow to it Great write keep it up
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This flowed quite nicely, and you wrapped it up beautifully. The rhyme went in and out, and some of it sounded slightly forced, but altogether, everything worked wonders.
The poem really made me feel how you feel for this person. I could tell that they mean a lot to you, and I can empathize.
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hmm...there is no rhyming...i made sure of it. I think the way its written makes it look like i tried to rhyme but gosh no. Rhyming to me takes away from your thought process.
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Oh...hahaha. There are just a couple of lines that rhyme:
ecstacy/me and divine/mind, for example. I kind of just assumed that it was written with a tiny bit of rhyme, and that they were loose rhymes not designed for the sake of rhyme, but for the sake of accentuating. -
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with ecstasy and me...me isnt the final word in the sentence...as with divine and mind...
oy i wrote it for an english project. so maybe when i wrote it...it was an accident...who knows? lol
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Oh, very nice. The last two lines are my favorite. Thank you for entering my contest. I wish you much luck.
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you express yourself well here
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"You had the voice and the swagger that sent me to ecstasy.
That style, that smile, the warmth you gave me,
made me feel brand new.
You ran chills up and down my spine, gave me oh so divine
butterflies that sent my body, mind,
and soul to an unknown paradise." great very well written i loved it alot.Thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
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I love the idea of the poem... it really hit home
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here and there
It was a hit and miss to me. I saw that it was a reley good poem but it started to crumble around the third stanza, but I do like some of the terms you used. My favorite being,"My inner demon yearns for you" -
He must be a wonderful person, this poem is so alive with feeling, it just draws one in.
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sharing secrets that were tossed and safely caught - like that line ^^ i feel u... when you expect less than the actual result it's like whoa! btw, thanx~ lol...
2nd stanza paints the picture well... I thought whip cream for some reason (no, not erotic... just sort of very "light and nice")
3rd stanza is just blah... but then the ending of 4th wraps it up fine.
like a summer night, on the beach after a
rain storm; you refresh my senses and leave me
with a forever lasting smile. - makes me just go "awwww... sweet"~
You have broken me in. I no longer wish to be with
anyone. You're the prescription to my pain and I need
you daily. The love you give never leaves my senses...
I pray you never leave my side. -wow, what I like to call "soft strength"
lol... you're not "feigning" love, you're so feeling!!
But, I'm sure you know best how to go about taking care of this addiction <3 best wishes~ Alex
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this poem is really good it shows the love a girl to her man. I liked it a lot.
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