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Alone,I stand

                        I stand ankle deep
                        In icy cold water
                  My long brown hair whips my face
      I stare at the ground wondering what is under everything
            My simple white skirt flows in the wind
                            unoticed
                    unoticed I stand,alone
                A rose to my face, I stand alone

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  • artis
    October 29, 2008

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    such a chill and yet a poignant portrait of

    a lonely soul standing in a sea of perhaps tears, still holding on to the bloom of her youth, and hoping to avoid any more thorns along her sorrowed path...great write...Artis


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    Yes I think we all wonder what is under everything some times... a feeling of yearning in this... and we all stand alone sometimes. Well done!


  • The Otep
    April 23, 2008
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    Aww, that is so beautiful! Good luck in the contest
    Great vision and very well written!!