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pieces unfolding...

i

she folds
in pieces;
a jigsaw of
layered conundrums
and contortions,

sensual and seductive
in turns;

each a lie ~
it rests in
mottled ages now.


...she is almost happy

the picture lid
and the corner edges
almost sum her up...


ii

scant:
undressed

 

and unseen,
caressed in fiction
and fantasies

of who knows who

or when or how?

 

she yearns for a beginning,

and an end to this tautness

that renders her

 incomplete,

she yearns for herself

 

 comfortable

and free

 

iii

 

one glass of shiraz

too many,

it's a good wine,

heady and bold

 

 she knows her skin no longer fits

the angel cards have told

her twice this week

she is living a lie

she sags and slurs

and somehow

she knows

 

the truth is harder than

the lie...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 



 

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  • apples fell
    June 30, 2008
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    This has such an aching feel. Like when you burn your hand and then slowly dip it in cold water. Poetry like this leaps off the page. All the words are chosen to add strength, there is nothing here that is overlooked or slighted. I have missed your words Elaine. It feels good to be back here.

    ;


  • Ronztrek
    June 30, 2008

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    From time to time, I come across gems here in AP, this one definitely shines as one of them. Your poem has drawn me in , as I read it with a soft tone, flowing through each verse. What an Oustanding Piece!


  • vieve gold member
    May 27, 2008

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    Certainly wouldn't have much use for lies if they didn't protect us.

    Your details pull me in - shiraz (particular favorite of mine) & the angel cards (fairy cards for me, but a similar thing).

    I like the unfolding, the coming closer to truth & wholeness.


  • Heart Sutra
    May 26, 2008
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    You are one of the best of the best writers Elaine!

    Stunning!


  • Namita
    May 9, 2008

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    the second part is simply amazing. simply AMAZING, Elaine. I think I missed this one..

    - namita


  • individuality gold member
    April 27, 2008

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    i have not read one of your poems for ages so here i am three good poems, skin deep, the spirit within though can wander, aye the truth is always harder. a good piece.


  • Heart Sutra
    April 26, 2008

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    perfect

    you are such a unique and brilliant writer elaine.

    you never miss a beat in your work!


    • misselaineous
      April 26, 2008
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      thank you for a lovely comment
      i wrote it for your skin contest but removed it
      i want to do much better than this


  • Nicolette gold member
    April 25, 2008
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    Your light shines through here, Elaine...

    Beautiful poetry - such depth!

    ~ Nicolette


  • ArtFullyMe silver member
    April 24, 2008
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  • tara wilson gold member
    April 24, 2008

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    "scant:
    undressed



    and unseen,
    caressed in fiction
    and fantasies

    of who knows who

    or when or how?"

    ..


  • transcendental baby gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    I know I should see the sadness in this, but for some reason I see courage and self-determination ... we all get to that point where ours lives seem to have added up to so little, and the equation of who we thought we were and who we know we have become just don't equal up to much ... but I think letting go of our illusions gives us room to grow something new inside that saggy skin ... least of all, I hope so


    • misselaineous
      April 24, 2008
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      yes it was not meant as sad
      just a reflection
      and a hope
      thank you for stoppoing by

      elaine


  • NurseChilly gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    I love you lady.... even with the sags, bumps and bruises and the hush of your words and the empties and the wibble of your mouth when you get nervous

    yes, I love you.... but i have one complaint, NO GIN

    clink clink... off to bed I go......

    love
    Gilly.x

  • Suzanne Dia
    April 23, 2008

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    Sounds like so is the alcohol..

    I love shiraz most of all, though my allergies curse me when I drink it. It is the smoothest wine most of the time, goes down easy .. too easy.

    I love the 'almost happy' reference.

    I think we are all like this.

    We all see the lies sometimes, even if they present themselves differently.




  • lisargh
    April 23, 2008

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    the truth is harder than the lie, oh how many times have ithought that, even now, dillusion is great,,,,till it gets unstuck!!
    it is great to see you writing again babe x a great write speaking of sadness, fear and truth x
    love you babe xxx


  • philosphyofkate silver member
    April 23, 2008
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    oh the second part... yes. god, yes.

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    'caressed in fiction' -

    this line stuck out incredibly, its because i have immersed myself in books lately.

    i love these pieces, soft, sensual and so telling.

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