Hues of color swirl into each other
as the music plays.
Every beat vibrates my being
and lifts me to a new consciousness.
I am licking the palette of my dreams,
tasting my subconscious desires
while fully awake.
I bask in this forbidden euphoria.
Please, don't let it end
as I roll off into the summer springs,
and catch a glimpse of that
which I was never meant to know.
Author notes
Picture Prompt:: http://phrogz.net/nodes/abstractpictures.asp
I went with licking the palette of my dreams as my line choice.
A contest entry
- PIF - by Arkbear by Arkbear.
463 points, ended April 23, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Best, New or Old by whispernthedark.
400 points, ended April 26, 2008, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - D is for... by Pandorea.
800 points, ended June 13, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Originality: (10/10)
Emotion: (7/10)
Poetic devices: (13/20)
Structure/flow: (7/10)
Cohesion: (7/10)
Title relating to poem: (7/10)
Personal opinion: (6/10)
Syntax: (7/10)
Diction: (7/10)
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Total:71/100
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this is really trippy with brilliant imagery. it seems colourful - though i can't say why.
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Such a beautiful, vivid write. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
♥
whisper
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*ish speechless*
wow....it's so colorful!!....its amazing.
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Congrats on winning the gold!
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CONGRATS!!!! You well deserve it!!!!!
~pithyAplomb.
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def deserved to win
i would have picked it before mine too
i would have had no idea how to "use palette of my dreams"
keep it up
congrats -
Thank you so much, Im so glad you like it!
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Wow :)
My pleasure to honor you with your first Trophy.....GOLD!!!!
Gold was my first as well, so I know how jazzed you must be
Congrats...well earned,
....love to see your talents over at my new site, http://www.DestinationPoetry.com when it opens in a couple of weeks
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I would be honored to be on your new site, send me a message when it opens! Thank you so much for the trophy, I'm so psyched!!
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Wow :)
Splendid write.....and your 2nd stanza is da bomb :)
....actually, every single stanza of your was eloquent with enough Imagery to tug at me and make me read your entry about 6 times :)
Such an almost, erotic, yet sensual piece of art you have penned.....I really like it :)
Good luck to you and your entry,
God bless you,
Bear ~
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damn...
...Beats my entry!
take care!
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Thank you for your comment. I enjoyed your post quite a bit, and I wish you luck.
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