Take a leisurely walk with me in my garden.
See why the bees pop in.
There's lanes and lanes of bright beauty.
You won't want it to end.
There's lots to see by way of variety,
The selections overtake.
You'd smile and laugh to forever
for there's lots at stake.
Why right here at this one tree alone,
you could find yourself free.
If only for a few, fast short moments,
you'd let yourself just be.
The stream is a recently obtained feature.
Sparkling like the sun.
Touch its waters; feel it on your skin,
venture in; its just wet fun.
Ahh, so much to love, and see in my garden.
You'll want to live inside its dome.
If ever you'd pay one visit, you won't risk it,
You'd want never again to go home.
A contest entry
- A WALK IN YOUR GARDEN by Richard Adams, A Winkling #76. by Lyndon.
2800 points, ended May 18, 2008, 15 entries
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a lovely walk
This is a pleasant picture,full of joy, in a lilting, bright poem.
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Thanks so much; this is a lovely review for moi
lol
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Makes me want to be there. This is just lovely. A truly delightful stroll. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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Thanks so much, Pamela, this is a wonderful reviewlol
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wonderful
i love this it made me smile! i havent read one that has made me do that in a VERY long time beautifully written!
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Thank you so muchlol wow, a lovely compliment.
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Oops. I just noticed ...
you have a typo in line 5. It should be "There's" , not "Thees". Don't know how I missed it the first time. -
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Thanks right on itlol
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Very nice ...
and very nicely done.
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Thank you so very much lol
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Cool...thankslol
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