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50 miles blues

you are gifted...

somehow you are able to harvest my senses
to channel them in a streaming flow

one single touch
u transform me
turn me into a psychedelic pipeline of shivers and sighs

one glance
my matter disolves
I get to leave the vessel I inhabit
and then
I'm just a limitless energetic presence
expanding and receiding
to and fro
in deaffening bursts
popping in and out of existence
constently flickering
like a lamp with an unstable current

you are gifted
and I'm...
I...
am.

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  • bloodflower
    May 6, 2008

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    amazing....
    it took me on a trip...
    "I'm just a limitless energetic presence
    expanding and receiding
    to and fro
    in deaffening bursts
    popping in and out of existence
    constently flickering
    like a lamp with an unstable current"
    I loved itttttt.... =)


  • XFaLLen-StarX
    April 27, 2008
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    you're just a limitless energetic presence expanding..


  • Sadistic Monkeys
    April 25, 2008

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    "u transform me
    turn me into a psychedelic pipeline of shivers and sighs"

    I love your words..

    amazing, really...


  • O b l i v i o n
    April 24, 2008

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    "I'm just a limitless energetic presence
    expanding and receiding
    to and fro
    in deaffening bursts
    popping in and out of existence
    constently flickering
    like a lamp with an unstable current"



    what an image.. really.. just amazing.. a great poet is one that can bring forth beautiful yet peculiar imagery and you did that my friend.. amazing sensation...

    hypnotizing...


  • N0sferatu
    April 24, 2008

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    amigo first of all let me assure you that 50 miles isn't far. it's the same neighbourhood. anyway, i read this yesterday but i didn't comment on it since i was talking to you. and yesterday i asked you who she is... your muse, but i what i meant was, can you pas it on to me later? i'm searching for a muse to inspire me.
    this was a great write and it's normal since you "apparently" have a great source of inspiration.
    nut i must say that you took the structure of your ending from me .

    Elie


    • sarajevo
      April 24, 2008
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      amigo...i have bad news...i dont share muses,get ur own


  • Apsinthion
    April 23, 2008

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    amazing.. transporting and heikeh.. i duno.. it honestly gave me chills for some reason and made me just stare at the screen for a couple of minutes wondering bout nothing and everything..

    you, are gifted..

    ~rana~


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