there is nothing I believe
nothing I taste
that isn't of foul dissent
nothing that once upon a time
didn't belong to her
she was all that is
all that was
all that made up that
which is who I was
and still am
through the nothingness
the nothingness I call my life
I search for something better
or, in the very least
something not as bad
not as bad as what I endure
to you I am bound
by every being in my body
anything that is involved in my life
anything at all is some how intertwined with yours
it kills me to not be with her
to not mean something to her
to not mean something
to the single most important essence
the single most important essence of my life
A contest entry
- Give me your best by good bye.
850 points, ended May 7, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think in general? Improvements?
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Really nice
This part right here, these few line, make the poem resemble a song, or at least when I read it.
"it kills me to not be with her
to not mean something to her
to not mean something
to the single most important essence
the single most important essence of my life"
Great job
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Woah, love it =D we definitely have all been in that place and can always remember the feelings.
Fav part
"through the nothingness
the nothingness I call my life
I search for something better
or, in the very least
something not as bad
not as bad as what I endure"
Beautiful, I can relate to it so much.
Keep up the great writing
x-Underdose-x
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this is so sad. i think at some time or another we have all been in that place. good luck w/ everything
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opps! forgot, sorry!!
all better now
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hehee! as usual! LOVE IT!! ahh! you're so amamzing!! I love all your poems! so glad you write, and that you got me into writting...more than I did lol! good luck in your contest yo!
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