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To Skip Across Tomorrow's Pond

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Tender young leaves

grasp at desperation'

the sun over runs

shadows avoided;

 

let spring’s abundance

awaken

gentle rains

and warm breezes;

 

fortune fear’s stone

to skip across

tomorrow’s pond

 

and disappear.

 

How seasons can change;

how they rearrange

in such cruel deceptions

leads one to wonder ~

is the sun but an illusion?

 

As unpredictability

drowns optimism,

an early frost

reveals the truth

that rents the root.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

"Perhaps when we find ourselves wanting everything, it is because we are dangerously close to wanting nothing."
- Sylvia Plath

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  • Lowercase Prelude gold member
    September 27
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    Very well done
    Your word choice makes this poem something captivating and makes the mind of the reader start to really work, trying to decipher what's going on


  • voodoo ink
    September 25
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    very well written, poet...


  • GreenHrtPaleMoon gold member
    September 25

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    This is beautiful and your format formidable. A very strong write that captures the readers attention with powerful imagery and emotion. Lovely.


  • PerfectImperfection
    September 22

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    This is quite lovely... You certainly have a way with words. The imagery is thoughtful and well composed throughout.

    "How seasons can change;
    how they rearrange
    in such cruel deceptions
    leads one to wonder ~
    is the sun but an illusion?"

    I especially enjoyed those lines. Well penned!


  • motel silver member
    September 21

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    wonderful background to an exceptional poem ... the way the write is structured around the Plath quote ... well done.


  • LadyShiva
    September 21

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    Amazing! This is a wonderfully written piece. It pulled me in from the first word and is still holding on. Thank you for sharing you gift.

    Lauren


  • XXVampireeyesXX
    September 21

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    wow that is a very real and amazing quote that flows with the poem very well! Indeed we find ourselves like that. Nothing to critque here for you did an outstanding job.... nicely done!


  • JadedSparrow
    September 19

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    Speechless

    Usually I find things that I dont really like in a poem. That isnt the case here. While I am far from an optimist, and generally enjoy darker works, I loved this piece none the less. Well written. Bravo.


  • Todays Poem Box
    September 19

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    Oh my my very well done.
    You are nominated for Poem of the Day
    In the group Today's Poem Box!!!

    Great job


  • klassy lassy
    August 10

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    "let spring’s abundance awaken gentle rains and warm breezes;"

    It's good to consciously seek the light, the evergreen of soul. All is terminal without the law of love to nourish and sustain our roots. It is an intelligent choice we don't always make when we are deluded that the sun's permanence is compromised by the clouds.



  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    August 9

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    food for thought in this poem...

    a great poem with a lot of thought. I think you have expressed your views well in a vivid use of words and lots of great image and metaphor.

    Yes, we may meet days of disappointment. However, we need to stirve for the unpredictable, the optimism, even though the root may be eaten.


    • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
      August 10
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      yes, I would hold to optimism even if there were no hope simply for the good it lends my soul.

      ken

  • Friday gold member
    May 23
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    The third and fifth stanza's hit home with me the most. You've used language beautifully and created an imperfect picture, in the best way possible.
    Unfortunately, having said that, this cannot be awarded anything as it does not follow all the rules.
    Thank you

  • Childsight
    May 12

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    Wow, this poem brings up a lot of questions and thoughts in my mind. the poem flowed very nicely. thanks for sharing!
  • celadia
    May 9
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    I liked this quite a lot, it sounded very natural.

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