Baby, baby, what can I say?
All these feelings get in my way.
I want to take you and squeeze you so tight.
Just tug and hug you all through the night.
Take in your beauty all day long
This has just got to be it, it can't be wrong.
'Cause it's so deep, makes me cry inside.
I feel so excited; the best of the best thrill ride.
You overwhelm me and my spirit soars,
all those adventures and romance tours.
I see your face when you're not even there,
this makes me know how much I really care.
Baby, hold me in your dreams at night.
I need to feel you always, you're so out of sight.
Can I stay near you all the time?
Baby to call you, I'd spend my last dime.
How come it took so long for you to get through?
My life was spiralling into a blank, dingy blue.
But now you're here and I won't waste no time,
doing whatever it will take to insure that you're mine.
A contest entry
- My deepest Feelings of within by Abner.
600 points, ended May 5, 2008, 16 entries
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thanks you so much for entering. and i would like to commend you so much for this stanza.
How come it took so long for you to get through?
My life was spiraling into a blank, dingy blue.
But now you're here and I won't waste no time,
doing whatever it will take to insure that you're mine.
thanks its means a lot.
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Thanks, glad you liked
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the flow reminds me of a valentine card.
its sweet
the plan of thought is direct
...the only thing i'd say thats not positive is the fact it -
a smiling piece of poetry i feel like singing now, baby baby where have you been, baby baby would you like a baked bean in all seriousness though, this is a good light and happy poem
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I love 'the' song you made out of it, hahaha I actually love your simple jingle more than my poem hahaha what does that say about my chances of winning this contest? hahahaha oh well one can't win them all hahaha
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