The expulsion of a million bodies
within a body, from a body;
countless girls, women, mothers
and lovers
in all stages of creation
or pre-creation
in one hospital bed
surrounded by blood and helplessness
and beauty,
entangled and separating;
crying and loving the joyous,
shrill and agonizing world
into which we throw each other
and embrace.
Covered in anything
we kiss
and shriek;
as he says your first sound
and mine were inseparable;
for in my most raw
moment, a wailing wrenching mess,
you exited my body and entered my life
and were calmed when you recognized
your own voice in my screams.
Surely, baby, in the weeks
and years to follow
we will not sound so alike,
but when you curl up on my chest
I still cry
and you still cry
and we smile
and we sleep;
and though my body has emptied itself,
you have never really left me.
Please tell me what you think
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Personal pains and perceptions
A cathartic poem is productive for the writer and those who share in that understanding. They are individual, cast-off regrets and provide a place to put away the overwhelming. One just accepts that is where the writer is either emotionally or mentally and does not assume it is meant to be a didactic piece-one hopes not.
Raw emotions offered with a nice twist at the end.
Tecohe
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WOW! A lovely way of wording something usually thought to be gross. Lol atleast by the people I know ^^ Very pretty, nice job!
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I loved this piece...you have strongly portrayed all these true emotions...
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Wonderful
Way to go I like that it took you through the process from start to finish, I have never heard it put quite that way before. Your are a gifted poet. Keep the pin flowing
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wow
this is really very good! it's the beauty and magic of life all wrapped up into one poem!the first stanza is my favourite! it was a little confusing at first, but i really understood as soon as i got about halfway through.....beautiful!
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Wow 1st comment!! lol this is a deep and powerful write. I had to read it a few times just to let it sink it.. It really moved me, the last few lines the most! Thank you for this great write!!
~*Cristy*~
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