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The woods within

The woods within

 

 

 

She looked for me within the woods in spring

And found me hiding in each tender flower

She called me to her with a magic power

The power she used to make the songbirds sing

 

In Summer heat she sought me in the shade

We frolicked in the shadows of the trees

And found ourselves within each other's ease

While hidden in a secret woodland glade

 

Autumn colours echoed in her hair

They danced with me within her perfect eyes

The place where I had found  my final prize

A Goddess floating in the forest air

 

When winter fell across our sylvan dream

At last we took the time to gather in

The fruits of love that we could now begin

To live on as we float along the stream

 

Set deep inside my dreams is where you'l find

The lover from the forest of my mind

 

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    April 24, 2008

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    This was beautifully penned and spilling out imagery within each line. You have captured the picture & brought it to life in such a lovely and colourful way. Loved these lines

    "Autumn colours echoed in her hair

    They danced with me within her perfect eyes

    The place where I had found my final prize

    A Goddess floating in the forest air"

    Only one small error I noticed in the last stanza it should be "Set deep inside my dreams is where YOU'LL find" Just missing the one L. Other than that, such a treasure to read


  • moonbumps silver member
    April 23, 2008

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    As soon as I saw the pic I thought-4 seasons.
    Depicted beautifully here with typical applomb!
    xxx Hilly


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    April 23, 2008
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    Pretty damn good. One row of bunnies coming up.

  • piccola silver member
    April 23, 2008

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    this is beautiful. I at first thought this was about a muse. Either seeking after one or she seeking after you.
    Very good job (in my humble opinion) I enjoyed everything about it and will enjoy reading it again.

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