Confronting feelings buried within,
pain will inevitably soon begin.
Pride rebuffs any attempts to amend
for selfish sins you stubbornly defend.
In a greedy world of shakers and takers
deceit leads to trickery and fakers.
Wandering spirits clipped of wings
attract trouble and the tears it brings.
Doubt slowly leads to growing despair
letting uncertainty foul the air.
A tortured soul unable to rest,
cheating in life yet failing each test.
Callously wounded by love’s antic,
jealousy is driving you frantic.
Blind to the maliciousness you bear
while contorting the truth beyond repair.
Fears festering in shadows and dream
constantly prey on low self-esteem.
In life there is nothing more tragic
than a broken heart, denied love’s magic.
A contest entry
- I'm in the mood for ANYTHING! by ForeverLastingComa.
550 points, ended April 25, 2008, 25 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wow, this is really good! It's so emotive, and beautifully written. Your style captures the readers attention, and encapsulates the essence of people's feelings, within real life.
My favourite part is:
"those selfish sins you stubbornly defend"
Very true!
Also the lovely ryhming scheme makes the flow - well, flow. (: -
I loved those last two lines. Beautiful! I love how you search for words not used everyday...like 'foul up the air' instead of 'fill.' it's perfec. I love it!
*HID*
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To be denied the dreams and the magic of love...low self-esteem, constant shadows. yet always denied loves magic...sighs...this break the heart my friend
niaish so much for sharing with me...and as always a winner!
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true
this is well worded with great flow and meaning, one of the best i've read.
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Yep. Stalkers are pathetic. Hard to simply label them weak or stupid though, as we're mostly all slaves to infatuation. We do incredibly stupid things in the name of love. Even when it's something else all-together.
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That was amazing!..you succeeded at grasping my attention which is really hard to do!..I guess that everyone has these feelings at times..amazing write..thanks you for entering and good luck =)
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Feelings are such a fickle friend and a great subject. Nice easy flow, I like rhyme and its not easy to get the meter right but this works well and makes for a good read. Well done
cyberartist
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Wow, this flows elegantly and is full bodied:0lol GL in the contest
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This is such a true, writing...you have a very good writing talent. There seems to be alot of emotion here and I really enjoy reading the whole thing.
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