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A Sip of Spring

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A Sip of Spring

I oft stood back and watched the gay rondel,
absorbed within the colors fast and deep;
and lost within a glass of muscatel,
I viewed the canvas lending eyes to weep.
When Venus blessed the dawn of newborn spring
and cherubs watched her soul from high above,
the Graces danced within a rondel ring,
expressing joy throughout their dance of love.
The death of winter brought them to the wood,
to gather ‘neath the canopy of spring,
rejoicing in the birth of maidenhood,
delighted Graces float within their ring.
    Lost deep within this artistry divine,
    I sighed and took another sip of wine.

 

 

 

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Painting by: Sandros Botticelli, housed in main Gallery in Florence: The Primavera.

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  • xCandieKissesx
    August 28
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    Very intriguing and unique piece indeed. I feel the imagery and creatvity seeping out of every word. Great job and congrats for making the spotlight!
  • So very beautiful as is the bloomin' spring. You did the grandeur of nature good justice in this very finely written poem. Nicely done! , Dannie


  • MysticalRayne silver member
    August 22
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    I'm not one to judge sonnet's for I really have not learned this structure. I have a hard time reading a lot of the old English and getting the gist of what is being said ~ I did enjoy this I just had to read it a few times and you have woven a wonderful tale. Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece

  • So well done. I wish I had the discipline to write something as structured as a sonnet. Lovely use of language, we should all respect words so much.

  • Dapigster
    August 21

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    Beautiful! If you enjoy sonnets, read Eusebius' works, they're amazing! You probably already have, though. Good rhyme, nice take on the picture. I like the last two lines especially. Great job.


  • Tirrell
    August 21

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    A beautiful sonnet, and love the imagery as near the end one can almost taste the wine upon the lips, very well penned. A treat to read indeed!

  • davidwright silver member
    August 21

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    It's a great piece and I enjoyed reading it. I chuckled at Muscatel bit. I know it rhymes but...

    Happy trails

  • Kappa
    August 21

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    This is a much better piece then mine. I must keep practicing. For a first attempt at an English Sonnet, I think I did ok. Hope it does not take me too long to master. I hope to flow like this some day. Thanks for sharing. UNT

  • Ronald Wiseman gold member
    August 21

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    Most beautiful.

    As a writer of classical poetry, you are tops. You may have the Charisma to bring it back into international favour. Lyndon.


  • nilav
    August 21

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    recreating all the beauty with words like this is very appreciable.....adding more colors and feeling to reach the heart....

  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 21
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    re-reading this from the spotlight, it is STILL a stunning sonnet.
    Great.

  • rbruce gold member
    August 21

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    Tremendous

    This may well be the best sonnet I've read for a long time. Clear music in the wording as if a mintsrel of old was accompanying himself with a lute as he delivered this to his audience.

  • this is awesome ^_^ lol. i know me and my teen slang
    but yeha love the word ought...i like that word alot, haha, one of my favs to say.
    but congrats on the bronze, and keep the writting, you do, do the sonnet so well
    Stephanie ♥

  • Another masterpiece!

  • Ha ha. It is 'oft the case when viewing art and drinking wine. Another sip was a cute tid bit to add to this viewing of "The Primavera." Very nice. Good to see an award on this. -Wil


  • macandrew
    June 10

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    A wonderful bit of writing that matches your image extremely well.

    A treat to read.
    John
  • Very well written Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.
  • a wonderful sonnet...

    I thoroughly enjoyed this sonnet. It is cleverly written, perfect metre, apt rhyme and I can understand it from beginning to end without having to rack my little brain.

    I also like the sip of wine at the end...in two lines that wrap the poem up perfectly.

    Well done and thank you.


  • manoguru
    May 18
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    hmm.. well written

  • this is beautiful Amera your write alwasy make feel I am in another place and another time you are a true poet with out a doubt your words are amazing I love htis write and I still have not found one you have written I do not like this is amazing!

  • Papagallo
    May 6
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    Darn I keep forgetting:
  • Papagallo
    May 6

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    Your sonnet was beautiful. I saw this painting while in Florence. You must visit Italy and France to feelthe beauty of the art. Take care, Papagallo (thanks for your comment)
  • This is so beautiful! It calls in Spring perfectly and soothes the senses. ^.^ I absolutely love your sonnets.

    You definately earned this bronze.

    ~Cassie


  • MargaretG silver member
    May 1

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    lovely

    This sonnet is a lovely companion to the mythological painting, describing the scene and personages for better understanding. How pleasant, to relax with a glass of wine and contemplate great art!
    Well done technique - congratulations for your trophy.


    • Amera gold member
      May 1
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      Thank you so much! This was a tough contest, I am lucky to place at all.

  • Ithica silver member
    April 29

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    What is your secret??? It must be a God given gift, or I need to start riding on the poets "slow bus" !!! Every Sonnet you write is a lovely image filled story and an amazing piece of art... AND I really loved this theme... (now I'm off to mumble about meter some more... )


  • aslanlight
    April 27

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    The words fit the painting perfectly! They could have been written with it. You're a master of the pen.

    Peace Georgia


  • micol gold member
    April 27
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    Rich and gorgeous, as textured as the painting itself. Very well done indeed.


  • Winklings gold member
    April 27

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    From looking on ...

    You brought out much (not all) of the mythology of the large and great painting.
    A fine Shakespearean sonnet, by the way. Your volta is there in the negative sense of "The death of Winter".  The concluding couplet is almost off-hand but true. You make much of the rondel and rightly so because 'La Primavera' is a fertility work of art in celebration of spring. The rondel is a fertility movement.

    I have enjoyed this poem very much and I wish you all the best.

    Lyndon of the Winklings.  


    • maa gold member
      April 30
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      for lyndon

      thank you, wise one, for the additional info about the fertility of rondels, literally and metaphorically ...
      our amera seems to be a poetic (and maybe more than just poetic) fertilizing goddess ...

      thank you for honoring her with a cuppie in your contest ...


      fertile huggies to you both
      maa

  • maa gold member
    April 26

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    okay, now you have definitely conquered my heart with your sonnets ... since you have decided to surrender to the entrancing bliss of meter, your verse dances even more gracefully than ever ...
    I knew that this marriage would bring forth the most delightful poetic heirs of your gift ...

    wonderful !
    maa


    • Amera gold member
      April 26
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      Thank you so much my dear sister.
      When I was working on this, you were on my mind as I tried to come up to your standards of perfection.

  • Titus gold member
    April 26

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    il più squisito

    Yes, this is in a style remotely similar to mine for which I quell much about how comparable we'd like to with Shakespeare in particular. There is much in this that gives you a style of own, such are the gay rondels, which, permit me for saying so, portray a slang term for dagger as a firtility dance with solemn overtones, that speak of the life cycle as a whole. Such large-format paintings were not unusual in the private residences of affluent families. The Primavera is, however, significantly illustrative of Renaissance classicistic iconography and form, depicting classical gods almost naked and life-size and a complex philosophical symbolism requiring deep knowledge of Renaissance literature and syncretism to interpret. Your composition is equally life size and interpretable, and brings out the life from this fine art.


    • Amera gold member
      April 26
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      Oh Tony!
      Thank you so much for the wonderful comment. You brought out things that I should have put in my notes. Your knowledge of poetry of this grnre is well known throughout this web site and having your signature on my poem means so much to me.


  • penman gold member
    April 25

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    Excellent

    Wow, what a creation. As usual your pen stuns with your great descriptions. best of luck in the contest.

  • JohnnyD gold member
    April 25

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    Reading this- me Cubbie- was like sipping the finest Melot under a setting Tuscany sun and then allowing the buttermilk moon to drizzle butter across the lobster on your plate- exquisite....

    refill on the wine my dear?

    dad


  • Swan song gold member
    April 25
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    So sunshine when you get a collection do I get a autographed copy? This is truly a gem here.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 25

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    Beautiful! You have really captured that picture and your form is superb.. not being a form writer myself I really respect those who can... and you do it wonderfully!


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    April 24
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    Oh I shall, no danger of forgetting it.
  • Wow! This is gorgeous!
    I love how you used the Graces (which evokes such a classical, artistic image and thoughts of civilizations long vanished from the map), and it really ties in with the old-style language and your perfected sonnet form.
    I always say you are the best traditional poet of modern times.

  • This is good——very very very good.
    A very impressive write.


  • Mansoor
    April 24

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    Wow... simply awesome, this is one of the best writes i have red so far of you. Superb!!
    i rate u 10 out of 10!!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    April 24

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    I love a love sonnet, and you have written some of the best I know, but this, I think, may be your best sonnet yet.
    It does have a volta and a resolution, but both are unexpected, yet utterly right. Meter flawless story telling superb. No I don't think it can be bettered.


  • blueyez
    April 23

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    I felt embraced by the Goddess as I read this! This is so beautiful written in the tongue of days passed. The rhythm is such that it rolls off your tongue effortlessly!!! Very well penned!
    Peace and Love always... and thank you for sharing your wonderful talent with me and all of us at AP amera


  • Faeryn
    April 23

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    Everytime I've read this and want to comment, something happens and I have to leave the computer. I really love this. It cheers me and I kinda need it right now.
    Love,
    Tay


  • moonbumps silver member
    April 23
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    Exquisite.
    Loved it-
    Everything-
    xxx Hilly


  • Emerald Dog
    April 23

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    What a beautiful sonnet to greet me - as spring begins to break (at last!) here in the old U of K. Your precious talent has succeeded in making these crafted words dance with joy! A true delight.

    Love & Peace,

    Kezz


  • RedAquarius
    April 23

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    So lovely, I read this out loud at my desk and my co-worker was sighing along with me in how refreshing it felt. This is artistry and I am glad to have tasted it!


  • Desire gold member
    April 23

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    Oh My!!

    Love the images You have painted also the tale told in Magnificent form as always
    Beautiful picture You complimented!!

    The death of winter brought them to the wood,
    to gather ‘neath the canopy of spring,
    rejoicing in the birth of maidenhood,
    delighted Graces float within a ring.
    These lines grabbed~~

    Keep that quill dancing~~
    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

  • Papagallo
    April 23
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    Ah wine the fruit of the vine. I enjoy reding your work. How you doit all simply admazes me. You know and do a little of it all. Best of luckin the contest. and a


  • sunshinegirl
    April 23

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    I think I am truly running out of words to describe your writing sis! This is beyond amazing! WOW!! I truly enjoy reading your forms, and this one somehow just surpassed every other one of yours I have read to date!!

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta

  • wow=] this was really really amazing

  • Mairi bheag gold member
    April 23

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    Right-o, more than two words this time. I keep telling you that your sonnets are maturing. Well this is a case in point. keep this up.

    (If Eusebius says it is an excellent sonnet, then it's an excellent sonnet. He knows one when he sees one)


  • Kiran silver member
    April 23

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    This is a beautiful spring poem, with lovely language and imagery.

  • Eusebius
    April 23

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    Bravo

    A most excellent Shakespearean sonnet, indeed! A most wonderful flavor and so marvelously put together--as Oliver said "More, more, please!" bravo... bravo... bravo...

  • This a very good reflection of the picture - tasteful, the right words and the perfect images. The form is, without a doubt, used properly. In a nutshell, excellent!

    Never ♥

  • Rich, Beautiful and Tasty!!!

    You have intoxicated me with this luscious view of art. Not only the art in the picture, but the art in the sonnet. You certainly put some deep thought into this one, as every line is perfect. The flow is impeccable and I so want to taste that muscatel at the end; put the glass aside and kiss me.


  • penman gold member
    April 23
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    Excellent

    Another fantastic creation. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.

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