I don't know if I could say I loved her
yet, loving her was more real
than anything I'd ever known
in this turntable called my life.
She questioned nothing and lived everything.
My eyes caught the devil in her heart,
and as we glanced at each in laughter,
her breath skittered and questioned:
"Why don't we do it in the road"?
Asphalt rumbled where excitement drilled!
Hurled into the dizzy spin of lust,
I scanned this paperback writer
who filtered smiles from a siphon of joy,
and needed her touch more than life.
Her skipped goodbye spun my earth to another axis.
Author notes
Group 3
"I look at the world and notice it's turning"
--Devil in her heart
--Paperback writer
--Why don't we do it in the Road?
A contest entry
- Inspired by the Beatles! by Reckless Butterfly.
350 points, ended May 10, 2008, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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CONGRATULATIONS ON A WELL DESERVED GOLD
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aliceramone
Thank you. And to you too on your wonderful trophy. Excellent. ~Pamela 
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Good job with this write. Fits the beatles theme well. Thanks for sharing and keep writing.
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Great stuff here! Extremely well done poem...pulling strings with the Beatles! loved it, loved it, loved it! bravo... bravo..
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Sinfully delicious is this
Your brought this poem together with wonderfull imagerySplendid weaving of words you have created with your imaginative gifts
Best of wishes to you
Tony
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LOL ...
this really struck me funny. I almost fell out of my chair.
Probably it wasn't meant to be funny, but that's how it struck me. I think it's totally perfect. Great write.
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Interesting poem
and where the promts take you.
Well done Pam. Very creative.
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excellent on the prompt and I love the ending especially "filtered smiles from a siphon of joy"...great language abound-excellent.
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these prompts are woven into meanings and unstated things: passion and desires...so very nice...PK
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this is full of the intensity the send lovers out into the night in search of one another.
well done
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Wow!
This is absolutely superb. I loved the subject matter, flow and presentation. As always, your writs are enjoyable to read and presented with clarity. Best wishes in the comp my friend
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Excellent use of the Beatle prompts; that ending says it all.
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