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morning swim

morning swim
discussing relationships
in the deep end

In a list

A contest entry

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  • Bruce silver member
    January 10, 2009
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    Cool - I love your sardonic touch.


  • CIndyReed
    July 1, 2004
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    I love this haiku, but kind of sad because a deep end is coming,good luck!


  • haikumonk silver member
    December 17, 2003
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    This is very contemporary in style and tone. Good luck.

    Don


  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    December 16, 2003
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    Exceptional one. hehehe..LOVE the ending. Has a layer of thought as well. Good for YOU!


  • queenie gold member
    December 15, 2003
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    winner

    i'm loving you.the ability to use so few words to say so much.good luck on that contest.you are a definite contender.i love haikus,yours rock.


  • haikumonk silver member
    December 15, 2003
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    ha! Interesting one..... leave it alone and see how it does. It's an interesting image.... a moment..... with someone else....... nicely done.

    Thanks again for joining me in this contest-class. I wish you the best always and to yours in your loving life.

    Don

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