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Last Night

Lighting trips eliminate attachments
spent gathering nonsense among the queer
selling individuality's tease.

There's a fool on the hill rolling up space,
grace waits on the nasty inquisition
as perdition breaks Home's delusion.

Rooted amnesia fills all my loving
understanding that I must leave alone,
last night feels like an eternity
reminiscing with the thoughts I own.

A bullet delivers the bed of peace
captivating like a Hollywood trance,
science looms for the sake of not guilty
as the angels and devils will romance.

Author notes

group 5 "when your dead you don't take nothing with you but your soul"

all my loving
not guilty
the fool on the hill

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  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 10, 2008

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    Congratulations

    So very pleased to see a shiny trophy on this verse. Well done and heartfelt congratulations! ~Pamela


  • CherylAnn
    May 8, 2008

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    Powerful

    This is one powerful write.It holds many messages within it.The depth is amazing and makes the mind really work.Truth in so much boldness and that is my favorite thing about you...You hold imagery with a great fascination and never loose the concept you start out with...Amazing as always my sweet admirer...
    I love the last line indeed...Actually the last stanza...
    Blessings
    ~CherylAnn~
    P.S
    I sure have missed reading your work...Glad to be reading it again...


  • 2lullabyhaven
    April 30, 2008

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    A Beatles fan-you did them justice with this onelol good luck in the contestlol


  • cheaphotelsign
    April 24, 2008

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    believe it or not, i was thinkin "very Beatles-esque" before i saw the author's notes...this is spectacular. the first verse grabbed me by my ass.lol...love love the third, "Rooted amnesia", wow...and you nailed the end here- i mean nailed it big time..no surprise. you are so gifted. i always love what you do.


  • RedAquarius
    April 23, 2008

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    Man you always nail that final stanza ya know? Great lines!!


  • zochit2me gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    You set the scene in the first stanza for all that follows. Great imagery as well as metaphors as you took me on the journey of Beatles songs with your style and presence...

    Great great use of the prompt...one of your best I would have to say.

    Becky

  • tara wilson gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    I love the last stanza so much...this is very well written


    (i hope so...)

    ..

  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    April 23, 2008
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    Line one moved me into the setting for the rest of this piece. You have truly handled the prompt well and incorporated those timeless titles with style and grace.

    Excellent work as I have so come to expect from your pen. Wow. Well done. ~Pamela


  • PainfulPleasures
    April 23, 2008

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    Lots of wonderufl imagery here. I like the way the poem's split, with the last two stanzas having a different rhyme sequence. The last two lines are definetly my favorites, though, I'm a nerd, and I like contrasts, so my opinion may be biased. xD


  • individuality gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    i like the beginning here, i think of hallucinations right away, taking away from reality. more drug imagery, and they were into their stuff a lot so yeah man. thoughts blown away too, aye, trying to define the mind after madness. a good ending, angels and devils on the battlefield of the soul. a great poem.


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