The moment I saw her I wanted to know who she was.
Her dark hair and sun tanned body.
Had me thinking what a hottie.
I caught her looking at me.
The sweetness in her eyes.
The sense of pleasure I felt inside.
How her dark eyes scoped me out.
Was it a look of hate,
admiration,
doubt,
or something else.
What it is I got to know.
It's killing me inside if I let this go.
Who is this mysterious woman.
That somehow captivated me from the moment I saw her.
So tell me please.
Please tell me what you think
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awsome...
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It was me and you just didn't know it! Yup yup! That's it, I'm tellin' ya! lol I love it. It's extremely mysterious. The power to know but left wanting is well illustrated. You have quite a way with words hun. Keep it up! =]
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Oh it was. Well damn you were hot!!! I am glad you love this one. I do have a way with words. But yeah I am going to try to keep this one clean.
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-bows- Thank you, thank you. You weren't too bad looking yourself I ust say. Some things aren't meant to be kept clean. =D
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Wonderful. Only one thing, I'd put 'what it is I have to know.' I think it'd make it... Just... More like the 1st 1/2 of the poem. Kind of. I don't know what I'm trying to say, sorry. But wonderful. Hottie, she sounds like it.
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Thanks. I was actually in a hurry to write it because it just kept flowing. And damn right she is a hottie.
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Wonderful peom.
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Thanks a bunch for the comment.
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