Within the comforting glow of the silvery moon
distance holds no barriers as the stars sing your tune
Embrace the melodies of your hearts
within the canopy of the night
Dream in velvet textures of midnight lullabies
as your thoughts hold each other tight
Wrapped snugly in strands of silver and gold
until the moon bows politely and the sun warms the world
A contest entry
- ~Sweet Dreams~ by Maybe Anastasia.
300 points, ended April 29, 2008, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Romance to the nth degree
Interesting form, rhyme, word choice. This is another step up for you. I have no criticism. Nice alliteration, metaphor and rhythm. It was a bronze well earned, Michelle. Good work.
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Thank you Greg, as always I appreciate you reading, as a novice you are going to have to explain to me one day what alliteration and metaphors are, because I don't know, I just write.
Luv ~sweetness~ x
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ooo this is awesome. It's so beautiful. Truely great write. I honestly loved it. The background took away from it majorly though. It was distracting as I read. BUt gret write and thanks so much for the entry.
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You're welcome and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
~sugar~
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such a sweet take on looking into the night
lol - I'm used to seeing monsters and the such and yet you have painted a picture here of something that isn't at all bad
well done!
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Thank you - sometimes I wish I could see a few monsters lol - could make for some interesting writing.
Value and appreciate your comment
~sugar~
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SWEET DREAMS, INDEED!
Good Luck in this contest with this short and sweet piece, Sugar! It's sweeter than the sugar in me cup o tea - if you ask me - and hit the spot after a long and frustrating day of work at the factory where MURPHY'S LAW rules each and every day. Perhaps, I'll have a dream like this tonight - a lovely woman like you beside me!
Love & Peace!
Earl.
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You never know sweetie - I've got a dream lover who I meet in mine - a beautiful place to be.
It's always a pleasure to recieve and read your comments.
Valued and appreciated
Love you ~sugar~ xxx
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Very beautiful Sugar. love the imagery that this puts in the mind. It is just very enchanting.
Love
Wayne Leon
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Thank you sweetie.
I have got to hit these contests while I can.
I noticed you have won another GOLD! Ease up will ya???
It means something to me too.
A fab comment as always, valued and appreciated.
Love ~sugar~xx
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